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Fri Apr 26, 2019 2:47 am
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25. wilted flowers

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you brought a vase
of wilted flowers
to brighten up
my room

you told me
i gave them to you years ago
but they're far beyond their bloom

i know it's "sweet"
that you remember
and saved my gifts
back then

but memories
can't buy me back
and dead flowers are no friends

our past is not a bargaining chip
on which to base our present
you hurt me in the time that's passed
and neglected all my presents

why do you think
the flowers died
when locked up
in your room?

you made my love
your trophy
but you starved it
in a tomb

now we have to let it die
so next springtime it can bloom
... again
Last edited by soundofmind on Mon Mar 27, 2023 5:52 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Fri Apr 26, 2019 11:56 am
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26.peace of rest

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missing from my chest
is a little peace of rest
and a rib or two

there's not a lot of meat
just a paper-thin sheet
and a nervous brew
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Sun Apr 28, 2019 2:13 am
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27. from up here

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promoted

from deep roots
to new leaves
fallen fruits
to new greens

and i'm still not sure
if i like the view
from up here

from small hopes
to big dreams
down slopes
to strong streams

is it really and better
with this view
from up here
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28. after the rain

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rainbows fade after the rain
after the clouds
after the pain

do empty skies tell you you're sane?
was there a gain
from all the strain?

after the struggle, fights remain
hrough all the downpoue who retains
their heart if rainbows fade and rain
comes back and back and back again?

if rainbows fade after the rain
after the shrouds
lift from your brain

do things get settled, or is it vain
to hope the rainbows
are maintained?
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29. with/without disguise

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there's a color i don't know
and haven't seen
in your eyes

i've never seen you clothe yourself
in such a disguise

there's a color on your lips
that's not you
that i know

i've never seen you change yourself
'cause you're clinging onto hope

does a shaven head mean something more
than a minor mid-life crisis

are you compromising something more
than past dreams that are priceless

are you hoping that a different look
will blot out all your losses

or is this something new a thing
because you really want it

there's a look that i don't know
and haven't seen
in your eyes

i think you're someone different now
both with/without disguise
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30. i really still don't know you at all

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i wonder if you saw it coming
the letter in the mail that said
it isn't gonna work for now
until both you and i change

i wonder if you read it
how it was intended
thought i know you chose to end it
with a shout

i wonder if you saw it coming
the letter in the mail that said
it isn't gonna work for now
until both you and i change

i wonder if you read it
how it was intended
thought i know you chose to read it
like a shout

and even after all this time, i still don't know if that was how
you really felt
because
even after all this time, i still don't know you much at all

i wonder if you see it coming
my letter in the mail that says
it really isn't working now
but i really want it to change

and even after all this time, I'm still afraid you'll read it
like an arrow
because
even after all this time, i still don't know you much at all
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Tue Apr 30, 2019 8:09 am
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And thus, NAPO2019 has come to a close.
Thank you to everyone who's commented
and/or read my poetry and enjoyed it,
encouraged me, and cheered me on.


Love ya'll.
uwu
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Tue Apr 30, 2019 6:37 pm
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Congrats on reaching 30 poems!

I really like missing from my chest - it's got a great rhythm to it, which really works with the rhyme. It reminds me of some of the poems I'd get stuck in my head as a kid because of their catchy rhythm!
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Congratulations on completing NaPo Sound! I missed commenting on poem 20 earlier, but that's gotta be one of my favorites. In these last few, I really like how you off-set that one stanza in 25, I think it worked really nicely with the content, and then I really liked your final two as well. The repetition in 30 just worked really well, and then 29 is a bit cryptic but I still thought it was interesting to try to decipher.

Well done! You made it!
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Thank you guys @Cadi and @alliyah so much!
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Congrats on getting it done, sound! I love your song-like poems, there's this lyrical quality to whatever you write and I guess it's so because you're a musician at heart! Yep. Congrats again! Enjoyed reading your NaPo.
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