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Sinking in an hourglass



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Sun Apr 08, 2018 6:30 am
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7.
This Yo Yo drops from my hand
But is brought back at my wrist's command

Once again this Yo Yo I throw
And once again back up it goes

Countless hours I enjoy
Playing with this marvelous toy

For you see this may very well be
The only thing I've let go of that's come back to me
Been walking a thin line between reality and insanity since '03
  





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Mon Apr 09, 2018 5:32 am
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Wed Apr 11, 2018 5:07 am
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Thu Apr 12, 2018 6:33 am
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10.
"A fairy waved her magic wand,
to create morning dew."
I knew I shouldn't dare tell her
that her prediction was untrue.
For the little girl by my side,
believes a fairy wand was the case.
So I will certainly not tell her otherwise
and have the magic vanish from her face.
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Thu Apr 12, 2018 11:04 am
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Aley says...



I like your poems better the less they rhyme, but i think you have a great way of picking out symbols and topics.
  





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Mon Apr 16, 2018 9:46 pm
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Sat Apr 21, 2018 12:10 am
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I'M SINKING GUYS. I'M SINKING.
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Sun Apr 22, 2018 5:45 am
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alliyah says...



*throws snowmonkey a life-vest* :)

I'm enjoying the variety in your poems snowmonkey - you are a clever rhymer and great at creating good flow especially in your rhyming pieces. I think 9 is my favorite so far - it's simple language, but comes across so genuinely!
maybe i make up colors for poetic cadence, but i don't think i can ever love someone who doesn't understand that teal is a different color than dark cyan
  





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Sun Apr 22, 2018 8:23 pm
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Cadi says...



You're not sinking, you've got this!

I think #8 is my favourite of yours so far - the last line brings across so much with really very few words.
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