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Sinking in an hourglass



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Tue Mar 20, 2018 5:42 pm
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When I think about it, poetry was the first thing I ever wrote. I showed my first poem to my dad and he called me "the poetry girl" (a title I was proud to be given) and he bought me a notebook. I wrote about several poems in that notebook, though I am sad to say I don't remember any of them.

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Anyways, I'm pretty sure 30 poems is all I've written since then -give or take a few- and now I'm crazy enough to be writing 30 within a month.

Oh I've also decided not to do a theme in my poetry because I personally just find that restricting, though I'll probably end up writing a poem about an hourglass.

So the ultimate goal is 30 to stay above the sand but I'm okay with sinking to my knees with 20 or even to my waist with 15 or 10.

Think I'll sink?
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You got this! :D
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alliyah says...



Ha - I love the play on words in the title here. I'm looking forward to seeing what you write snow! <3 Best of luck on the NaPo journey friend!
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Thanks @alliyah. Can't wait to read some of your poetry! :)
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Prepare yourselves for a crappy bunch of poems

1.
Charade

I know who you are
I know what you've done
I'm a witness to the pain
I've seen you run

Your motive is no secret
It's seen through your evil deeds
And I've met with your shadow
He says your heart's fashioned from greed

I know your every fear
Every mistake from your past
So stop fooling yourself
This charade of yours won't last
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2.
Midnight Rider

He is called the midnight rider
He gallops through these trees
He lived here and he died here
Now he howls with the breeze

He's seen in the shadows
His laughter's heard in the leaves
He follows you, always near
Ready to deceive

His fog will bind you
With little hope you'll be found.
You'll be lost in the mist forever
And beneath it you will drown

He is called the midnight rider
And haunts the place he died
Don't dare touch the Big Oak
For it's inside it he resides

If you dare explore the land
And try to follow the midnight breeze
You may see his ghost
Riding among the trees
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Evander says...



I really like the rhythm that you had in the first two stanzas of poem no. 2! I can't wait to see what else you'll write during the rest of the month!
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A bad and short one

3.

This ladder I climb
One rung at a time
Will take me to the top
So I mustn’t quit or stop

Consistency here's the key
This is not lost on me
For I know my climb is far
In my endeavor to catch a star

Still I must continue on
Until all daylight is gone
For it's in darkness that stars shine
And then at last, one of them will be mine
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TheBlueCat says...



Your poems are so enjoyable <3 You are good with rhymes! None of the rhymes feel forced, which in my book is a feat c:
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Thanks Cat :)
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4.

Wake up, your time is here
To fight for your land
Arise for he is coming near
Now take thy sword in hand

Your ancestors have fought
It's time for you to do the same
Using the skills you've been taught
Will make a legend of your name

Let wisdom guide your way
And courage be your defense
Prepare to fight night and day
No matter the expense

Treasures you will seek
And mountains you will climb
So awaken from your sleep
For you are the hero of time.......
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Audy says...



Snowmonkey! This thread is my first introduction to your poetry and I'm honored to read through these. I liked how you introduced your background and nickname. I smiled whilst reading these, not just from the careful attention to meter and rhythm within these pieces, but they all have some message and some kind of underlying idea they want to express so I love that!

I liked Midnight Rider best, it is silky smooth and the flow and use of imagery really captures that tension, that spooky feeling and that sense that the horse is galloping after you as you read. However, I also enjoyed Sticks and Stones for the really unique message and twist on the common saying. These are some cool poems here!
  





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Thank you very much @Audy :)
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I was promis'd on a time, To have a reason for my rhyme: From that time unto this season, I receiv'd nor rhyme nor reason.
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