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Fri Apr 06, 2018 1:38 pm
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bluewaterlily says...



The Ocean Lives In Your Eyes

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Last edited by bluewaterlily on Fri Apr 06, 2018 2:29 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Fri Apr 06, 2018 5:11 pm
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Which format is better?
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Fri Apr 06, 2018 6:13 pm
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fraey says...



I like the second more I think XD. But both look neat.
farewell, once, amidst a wave.
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Fri Apr 06, 2018 6:17 pm
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Thanks @killehan! I think it's a better representation of the concept of the poem. This is my first time really experimenting with formatting and line breaks. :)
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Sat Apr 07, 2018 7:12 am
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Sat Apr 07, 2018 12:00 pm
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I love the format and concept of your last poem here- so clever and effective!
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Sat Apr 07, 2018 12:54 pm
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Thanks @StellaThomas!
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Sun Apr 08, 2018 12:16 am
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pay attention to the woman behind the curtain


i am a whirlpool wearing
a silk cloak of soft skies
and sunny weather
but don't mistake
my softness as frailty,
for i am
a storm distilled into
what once was a slip
of a girl and one day
you will
pay attention
to the woman (behind the curtain)
i am
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Sun Apr 08, 2018 12:35 am
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Touch and go

I have left my heart at the altar
only to be jilted many times
but I have also left them waiitng
arms open, ready to receive me

but when they got too close
retreating, recoiling was not
just easy it was instinct

I’m the runaway bride sneaking
out of the cathedral at midnight
clinging to the shadows because
they may trail me but their tendrils
can’t ensnare me in a shackled embrace

I don’t know what it’s like
to be so close to someone
That I can feel their heart
resting against mine
the beats synching together
(and I’m not sure if I want to know either)

this game of touch and go
might be the death of me,
but it’s the only life I know
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Thu Apr 12, 2018 4:10 am
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she held me in her hand
soft and eager,
pliable like a ball of Putty,
as the walls of her fists
closed in around me,
I became a contortonist
my contours mirroring hers,
a distortion of angles and curves
bent into an abstraction
she called art
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Thu Apr 12, 2018 4:43 am
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like a plastic surgeon,
she traced my skin
in trails of dotted lines
seams to fold along
to make me into something
new: a bird with clipped wings


she found out
(the hard way)
that cutting my roots
would only make them
grow back, thicker and more
stubborn, but it's impossible
to sprout new wings
I could fashion a new pair
like Icarus, but they would
only be a poor substitute
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Sat Apr 14, 2018 3:15 am
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insipid kisses won't revive this relationship
holding me can't make me love you
or make you be loved more
you can carve my name in the sky
all night until the bleeding sun
rises, but all this stardust
won't uncross our stars
we are two galaxies never
meant to exist in the same universe,
let alone the same sky
we are much too empty and too vast
trying to engulf the other to hide
the blackholes in our hearts
that not even the light in our
stars can fill
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Sat Apr 14, 2018 3:23 am
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his lips meet mine
i feel the blazing sun
around us, as if trying
to infuse all its fire
into us and melt
the glacier standing
between us
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Mon Apr 16, 2018 2:42 am
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