The way you describe nature in #26 is very lovely Sonder from the word-choice to the imagery. I also like the connection of the thunder on the widow (in #28), and then the hidden flower in the fridge, to the untold feelings of the friend. It's subtle, but the continuity is there. You wouldn't automatically think these go together, but the way you've placed this scene together just works.
you should know i am a time traveler & there is no season as achingly temporary as now
I don't know if you're planning on writing one more to officially finish, but these are lovely. Like alliyah said, you do use nature imagery effectively and it's super cool. Congrats!
"You do ill if you praise, but worse if you censure, what you do not understand." Leonardo Da Vinci
Now, as someone who as actually experienced poem 29, eating tomatoes off the vine, I have to say when you first mentioned sleek black hair I was thinking tomato juice. I mean, it doesn't make sense if they are cherry tomatoes, but that was honestly my first thought just because of how you transition without much of a transition.
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