what lovely little treasures! i love your experimentation with longer lines and parenthetical additions and different spacing ... it all feels fresh and new even as the best part—your sheer wordsmith-iness—has remained.
so far, my favorites are 1 ('brush time through your hair' is gorgeous), 3 ('pout smoke' - love the imagery!), 5 (feeeels), 10 ('i am a fresh chapter' and the whole poem is so relatable), 12 (the end gave me smol chills of the best sort), and 13 (which just made me grin—what a wonderful gem of hopefulness)
many muchnesses of thank for this break-treat, and i can't wait to read the rest <3
an intellectual is someone whose mind watches itself ~ albert camus
@Sonder I really enjoyed reading so many of these! I love the unique imagery and the emotional tension in them. I definitely struggle to do anything with formatting that isn't just a simple line break or a single indent effectively - but I think you've executed your formatting very well in these pieces.
I like how 10 feels like a thought within a thought behind a thought. And I also really enjoyed 2 especially the unique imagery in the first three lines.
"I do not like compromises / being handed a needle and / splitting the seams between my teeth"
you should know i am a time traveler & there is no season as achingly temporary as now
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