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Tue Mar 21, 2017 5:48 pm
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Spoiler! :
This will be my first ever NaPoWriMo, and probably my first mental breakdown, at least induced by poetry. Also the title of this is 'paper and ink monsters', simply because you write poetry with paper...and a pencil. And the poetry itself is a monster because it's cringe or bad. :smt002
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Tue Mar 21, 2017 7:16 pm
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Woo, first NaPo! I am so excited for you and loving the tittle already. I completed my first NaPo last year and it was such a fun and challenging experience, and as a still-new Napoet, I'm excited to see what you come up with.
"A poet is, before anything else, a person who is passionately in love with language." - W.H. Auden
  





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Tue Mar 21, 2017 9:18 pm
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bluewaterlily wrote:Woo, first NaPo! I am so excited for you and loving the tittle already. I completed my first NaPo last year and it was such a fun and challenging experience, and as a still-new Napoet, I'm excited to see what you come up with.


I appreciate the encouragement!
  





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Sat Apr 01, 2017 5:59 am
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1. The Midnight Train

I boarded a midnight train to anywhere,

and now I'm kind of guilty you see,

for I had stood by limbs of broken bark and leaves,
who had stroked my spine, whose uncomfortable touch,
left my shirt soaked through and through,
by the hoarfrost tongue of the countryside's cult of pines.

I felt surrounded then; as I do now,
bound by every hanging branch,
suffocated by nostalgia, and so I tripped and ran,
a white hare, angered by the hoarse pleadings of the quivering limbs,
snagging on my olive, virgin skin as they plead,
won't you stay, oh won't you stay, for another moon's rise?

So more nimble and weary I travelled,
until huffs of gasoline and smoke met my nose, and surely,
I had thought clouds could not smell so putrid and vile - and there!
Surely, I would never thought there would be a way out,
and here before me an oiled train awaits!
But there I stood, a deer in the headlights,
frightened I had gone astray.

But I could not be a passenger, waiting and watching,
hoping my life would get better;
so I welcomed my disgust,
allowed its rancid scent to envelope me,
and hope I not perish in its grasp,
so I abide, although I wavered,
when they opened their fork-tongued,
bark lips to hiss sickly sweet lies.

I could rely on escape no longer,
so I exhaled smog and grinded my teeth together;
for surely, surely
I was my own midnight train.
  





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Sat Apr 01, 2017 6:52 pm
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I really love the concept of midnight trains and that feeling that is present in this to run, to travel, to see. Love the details and specificity of "hoarfrost tongue", there is really lovely and provocative imagery in that. :3 I am so excited for this thread! <3
  





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Sun Apr 02, 2017 8:19 am
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2. I Am Here

There is
nothing to see, hear,
to say or do.
I exsist, in nothing,
here,
waiting for you.
  





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Sun Apr 02, 2017 4:25 pm
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Holysocks says...



I love how simple and yet lovely the second one is! The first one went into so much detail and I think it's really cool that you went from a rather long, detailed one to a really short one. cx

I also find the line:
I exsist, in nothing,
very curious and intriguing! How does someone/something exist in nothing? I like it!
100% autistic
  





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Tue Apr 04, 2017 12:13 am
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3. Window Eyes

Laurels of stars rest upon Orion's godly brow,
a kilt of entwined holy things; alive as they
open wide their window eyes, once shut tight,
pearly iris' glinting aggressively, a cobra in its wake.
Stirring their sharp wings in arousal,
shot down from the archer's opalescent bow.

Deliverance of sweet seraphs color dead skies,
and the flesh and blood mewls in ecstasy;
for their gods had finally come!
Smiles stretch their faces as they cheer
and look above, laughing in wonder,
preaching in spite of a soon to come death.

And the man falls to his knees and cries,
O God Why,
as the stars burn him alive.
  





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Tue Apr 04, 2017 9:46 pm
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4. Wardrobe of Rain

The people are cold,
the people are weary;
my steps are laden,
my mind is clouded,
the skies are scream at
oiled cars screeching
at rain-slick streets,
and the rooftops,
clothed in sleet.

The wardrobe
of the rainy season
is upon us now,
and the cloak of chilly fog
whose slumped body
coddles the perverse
minds of men, enshrouds
their beastly thoughts.

It is the yellow toothed,
foul-mouthed scrappy dog,
soaked to the bone
who wails his laments,
down to the homeless
man down the street,
to up above, to
crying clouds.

Spoiler! :
rough and unedited.
  





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Sat Apr 08, 2017 3:47 am
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5. Sea of the Dead

Here lays the headstone of a girl whose dead;
I know not of her age or if she'd wed,
but I think her rotting body will be
supple enough, deserving
of our encroaching searching,
pawing gritty soils, whose dirt body ached as we
desecrate the corpses' muddy sea.
  





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Sun Apr 09, 2017 11:03 pm
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6. Imaginary Girl

He remembers
her hair, her laugh, innocent love.
Angst for an imaginary face.
  





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Mon Apr 10, 2017 9:13 pm
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7. Hellion

When all was quiet,
and Mom was silent,
I'd crawl under the bed
and play with the monsters
in my head.
  








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