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lizz's lyrical landing



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Mon Apr 24, 2017 11:59 pm
Brigadier says...



Demons in the Street-NaPo for 4/24/17
another one that has gone through the publishing center cause i felt like it and i really need to start moving back to the humor poetry i used to write

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LMS VI: Lunch Appointment with Death

  





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Wed Apr 26, 2017 1:58 am
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at this point, i'm just done
no more of these excuses and trying to get away
i'm just gonna have to meet my maker

and eat that final god damn piece of the chocolate easter bunny

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Thu Apr 27, 2017 3:20 am
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and as the music flows by my head,
I think of all of the concerts I've gone to.
All of the music that I've ever heard rushes,
so swiftly back into my mind and it's like I never
stopped listening. I like this feeling, it's good and happy.
Maybe I'll finally be at some sort of peace, now that the radio
is blasting next to my bed for all eternity.

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LMS VI: Lunch Appointment with Death

  





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Fri Apr 28, 2017 12:22 am
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They always say, that April showers,
they're gonna bring May-ay-ay flowers.
And wait every year as the days roll by,
just watching clouds float in the sky.

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Fri Apr 28, 2017 12:24 am
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they always said it was too tough
and me trying to get through life would be rough
but the piano sang a melody to me
it took me in like the siren's song and i just wanted
to sing and play along

i learned how to play on a thrid try at third hand
it was an upright piano, not too fine, and the keys always sticked
even back in its glorious prime
the hymnal book was stolen in '53, from somewhere east of the mississippi

all my cousins, they learned how to play, on baby grands and expensive lessons
that wasn't me for they said that i just couldn't learn, i wasn't smart enough
but when the devil asked for a piano player
my hands slid across the ivory and caught the sheets on fire
i blew the devil's mind till smoke tunneled out his ears

didn't even have to go down to georgia to get it down

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Fri Apr 28, 2017 12:29 am
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sometimes i write things quickly and i don't edit at all.
i don't pay attention to the grammar laid out before me,
i don't even bother to capitalize the 'I's.
but that's my style and i'd rather like it if you let me be. even if i type out lines like this, ones that stretch into actual sentences, looking nothing like the lines you're use to.
i dance around styles like they were fire rings and i'm trying to escape the smoke that's burning my eyes.
that's just the way i am and i'd rather like it, if you don't complain about these things.

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LMS VI: Lunch Appointment with Death

  





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Fri Apr 28, 2017 12:31 am
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The devil watched my hands run across the keys,
the fire burning hotter and hotter as I hit verse after verse.
My voice was growing hoarse from each refrain but kept on going,
just trying to gain, a shot at redemption.
Some fiddle players go for a violin made of gold,
but I was imply trying to win back my soul.

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Sat Apr 29, 2017 2:51 am
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orange soda and light beer
yellow labrador and black labrador
drinking buddies of sorts

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Sun Apr 30, 2017 3:33 am
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I'm getting a bit older
(nearly 16)
I know it's not something you like to think about
(since you're getting older too)
But you know it's happening so just accept it
(it's only 5 months now)

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Sun Apr 30, 2017 4:02 am
alliyah says...



Lizz, I enjoyed reading the musical themes in some of your last poems. This one's great: "The devil watched my hands run across the keys,
the fire burning hotter and hotter as I hit verse after verse.
My voice was growing hoarse from each refrain but kept on going,
just trying to gain, a shot at redemption."

The mix of music and the religious references are humorous and unique.

Your poetry is just bold and unapologetic. This line also made me smile: "i dance around styles like they were fire rings and i'm trying to escape the smoke that's burning my eyes."
Thanks for sharing your work! :)
you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now
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Mon May 01, 2017 1:36 am
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I see the humor coming back (and the reference to "The Devil Went Down to Georgia") in these last few poems. Congrats on a great NaPo month! :D
"You do ill if you praise, but worse if you censure, what you do not understand." Leonardo Da Vinci

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Mon May 01, 2017 1:43 am
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Last poem which is really from a longer set of lyrics I'll post I. The green room later on

I grab my glasses and hat
Then my whip and my staff
And I set off the desert to wrestle a calf

Maybe they don't take me seriously
But hopefully they won't find,
the mean end of my colt 45

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LMS VI: Lunch Appointment with Death

  








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