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Poetry Review Poem Challenge



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Points: 1200
Reviews: 47
Tue Apr 12, 2022 5:03 pm
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Birdman says...



To the fair poetry reviewers of the city of Yewis,

I, Birdman, challenge you to become critical Bards for the next piece of poetry that you review. You can search through the wide expanse of the Green Room for your muse. Or, with National Poetry month afoot, you may be able to request that a friend allow you to take inspiration from their work.

(This meaning that you should write your review of a piece of poetry in whatever style of poetry that you may choose. An extra prize may be given out to those who complete a sonnet though...)

If - if - you complete a review of a work of poetry and you have at least one original stanza of critique (of four lines or more), then I will give you 50 bonus points.

If you've completed a Green Room review, then I'll give you the directions to the Knights of the Great Hall and question why you have not yet joined us.

Submit your completed reviews in the thread below by the end of NaPo (April 30).

The usual rules apply to this joint poetry and review challenge.
1. Spam reviews are not allowed.
--> Your review must have content and your lines of poetry must be related back to your critique of the original work.
2. Plagiarism is frowned upon and will be reported to a moderator.
3. Don't take this challenge too seriously.
Guardian of the Green Room,
among other things...
  





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Reviews: 542
Tue Apr 19, 2022 9:49 am
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Liminality says...



Here is my entry! LINK

I've also enspoilered the poem part here:

Spoiler! :
I. Interpretation

I thought the speaker came from times long gone,
“unto the saints” is language that seems old.
The background is the opposite of dawn,
a dark and grainy texture: jaded, cold.

The themes perceived: injustice and one’s rage,
though left unsure: the story told elsewhere.
I could not see the details on the page,
of hints and references I’ve had my share.

II. Structure

How strong the speaker’s voice, consistent, paced!
I thought they came from noble blood or wealth.
Their words were weighted: “craven” and “grace”;
their story though is yet well-clothed in stealth.

I assume the serpents are conceit:
the stanza after them does speak of sin.
The “birds” and “hares” fly fast, escape my wit,
for me the link between seems to grow thin.

Who features in the stanzas three and four?
The lines tell only what the creatures suffer.
Are they the speaker? Someone they abhor?
I think for these my mind could use a buffer.

III. Punctuation
I noticed semi-colons only late
and am unsure if they need to be there.
The hiding hares and burrows do relate
in structure as in topic. (Why not a comma fair?)

IV. Rhythm
The rhythm of your verse at large is fine,
and I adore the little hints of rhyme:
how scared the hares, the “too . . . free” line,
some assonance to mark the reading time.

I wonder if Kylia’s world would use
a metered or unmetered verse as norm?
Perhaps a setting thing to introduce
and see if Kylia’s person would conform.

V. Conclusion
Obscure the tale may be, this piece draws me
into the brooding mood the speaker bears.
How fascinating would it be to see
the figures they describe in all their flairs?
she/her

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