Young Writers Society

The first picture was my attempt after seven or so years being completely away from sketching and of course I picked something with a ton of detail - very much out of my range for now. Still, the first picture was terriable and I disliked it so much, I redrew the picture.

This was the picture I was looking at for reference.


The revised picture. I was putzing around, and I kind of like the slight blurriness. At first, I wasn't so sure but it seemed to grow on me at least. Opinions welcomed.


The original drawing, to compare. I believe the first was a vast improvement.


Thanks for looking.

That looks nice for a first try in ten years or whatever, lol

My main critique is that everything looks really two dimentional. To fix this you could add some shading to the people and some perspective to the buildings in the back. Also, I think this would look better if you were to finish coloring it, and used a bunch of colors, not just red and blue.

The smoke looks especially good.

Thanks Jenna for the input. I think I will work on that, creating 3D and work on shading some more.

Also, I think this would look better if you were to finish coloring it, and used a bunch of colors, not just red and blue.

Possiably, but honestly I hardly use colour unless I have too. I enjoy black and white better.

The smoke looks especially good.

Thank you!

Remember, the smoke is from all the gunpowder goin off.
First things first, the human anatomy.
*sigh* Id never thought Id say this, but find a few how to draw manga stuff online.
The proportion is horribly wrong in manga, but it serves as a basis for drawing human bodies.
For the eyes, just reference photos.

When looking at photos, remember to draw whats there, not what you think is there.

Thank you, Sponson. I will try that. Magna, I think is a bit tricky, but I will get the hang of it. I like the tip of referencing photos, that is a good idea!

The buildings look a little tilted. You might want to use a ruler or some other straight edge to make them a little more level. CD cases work nicely.

It's nice for a first try. Yeah, I would use a ruler for the buildings and such. Also, the human anatomy really needs some help on that. So yeah, just listen to Sponson and everyone else. XD

LOL, thanks guys. The people crack me up, though.

Eventually, I have people down. Just have to keep at it, and harness it again.

it's cute... i always tend to copy things down and they look all weird... but this was cute hee hee

It looks really... different from the original drawing, but I still like it

I have that picture in my American History textbook!
My only complaint is that there is so much gunpowder, and only two guns! (But the gunpowder looks cool, regardless.) Maybe add more men in so that it really DOES look like a massacre--and not a Hamilton/Burr shootout. ; )

Nice work!

So, what does everyone think of the change? I slowed down and put more effort into round two. I know it's not perfect, and I'm gradually learning shadowing and drawing people again but I'll get there eventually.

[quote="Jennafina"]That looks nice for a first try in ten years or whatever, lol