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Mon Oct 03, 2005 11:17 pm
Sponson Light says...



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Right arm too long (her right not ours)
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Tue Oct 04, 2005 6:21 am
Emma says...



Sweet. As you said one arm does look larger than the other, but it is still pretty good. Also I am not too sure on the shoes. Maybe they are too small or something.

Apart from that... Nice work - as usual.
  





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Tue Oct 04, 2005 12:32 pm
Nox says...



Both arms look fine to me unless I'm not seeing something..?

The right shoe (our right) is a bit wrong and they do look quite big.

Nice work though.
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Thu Dec 13, 2007 8:20 am
CrimsonRose says...



i like this, it reminds me of a close friends style.
i agree about the arm and the shoes... but a lot better than i could ever do, congrats.
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Take him and cut him out in little stars,
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That all the world will be in love with night
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Sat Dec 15, 2007 6:30 pm
Wolf says...



I also agree about the arms and shoes, but I really like the sketchy look of it. :)
I love the clothes and the shovel. :P
So yeah...this is really good!
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became everything i lost.


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