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Thu Dec 20, 2007 11:42 pm
ElizaW says...



Just looking for some comments before I finish this.
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Ess, the main character of one of my two novels-in-progress. Painted directly into photoshop.
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Fri Dec 21, 2007 12:53 am
Via says...



This is a little too "Lara Croft Tombraider: PC game" for me. The flying man is very, very computer generated....I mean, it shows way too much?

The details on the mountains in the background could use a fine tuning, as well.

Maybe try drawing it out first and THEN editing it on the comp? I don't know if you can even do that, but if you can I'd try it! :)
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Fri Dec 21, 2007 1:20 am
Sureal says...



I'm lovin' it. The only part that feels off is the brown boot things - they look rather flat in comparison to the rest of the angel dude.
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Fri Dec 21, 2007 7:11 am
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Alteran says...



That is really good. I use photoshop too, but i could never make something like that directly from it. My only concern is the darkness, it makes it hard to see the detials on the angel. I really like the sun shining through his wing. It looks like an oil painting. I like it very much. Yet another reason to hurry up and read your story.
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Mon Dec 31, 2007 10:46 am
bubblewrapped says...



That's awesome!

I think a bit more detail and sharpness is needed in the foreground, but I'm assuming you'd do that already. I love the light on the angel guy's arms, but it needs to be carried through on the rest of the picture - I can't tell where your light source is coming from and it's bugging me LOL. Try to bring that through a little more, perhaps.

Overall, a nice pic. I'd love to see the finished product ;)

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Mon Dec 31, 2007 4:18 pm
Myth says...



I love the wings and his hair but the background seems so dull--I'd have expected a more dramatic scene--and his legs look awkward positioned in that way. Hope to see the finished version.
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Mon Dec 31, 2007 4:47 pm
Rydia says...



I like this in general but I think the boots need quite a bit more work and I agree that it's very dark so there isn't really a lot of contrast and some of the detail is and to make out. Compared to the angel, your background is very simple and rather plain. Also, the sun/moon shining through his wing is a touch too circular. Try to make the shape a little less regular and fade it out further so it's more realistic.

In general, the figure is well detailed but a little stiff and he doesn't really seem to fit with the background at the moment.
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Wed Jan 02, 2008 5:45 am
cynicalgurl says...



This is incredible. I would never have the patience to do something like this by hand, let alone on the computer. I have to agree, though. His boots do look flat in comparison to the rest of him. I love the light saber thing he's holding! Reminds me very much of Star Wars. :D

...But that's probably not what you're going for, so ignore me. I've been... what's it called... probed? No, but that'll work for now. I've been reading and watching a lot of sci-fi, so that's all I can think of at the moment, it seams. :D Again, this looks really cool. His wings are amazing. :D
  








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