Young Writers Society

The bedroom: I understand it, indeed. But it's definitely needs some shading in other places besides under the window. Also...darker lines! If you like doing light lines, that's fine...but when you have all your light lines go over them again and make them darker! They re just so light that I have no idea what is going on on the bed...is it sheets? a person? two people? a dog? No one knows! :]

The far wall is very bare. Even the dresser is rather bare and seems to be missing a few lines. I would also cut the light fixture a bit..it seems too tilted to make sense. Either shorten the front bars or shorten the back bars and show some hint of the lights hanging from the other side.

Happy Editing!