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Tue Dec 04, 2007 10:24 pm
Empress Kat says...



Just some fun with watercolor... my scanner doesn't pick up every little bit... anyway, what do you think?

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Tue Dec 04, 2007 10:33 pm
Layleun says...



I like it. Very good. The shoulders were a bit too square but that was pretty much it. Spice up the background by the trees a bit more and you'll have an amazing watercolor ^^
  





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Tue Dec 04, 2007 10:38 pm
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I think her feet - the right one in particular - seem a bit out of proportion, a bit long. Also, the directions of her feet seem to be nearly mirror images, square... but her knees are facing different directions. Again, it's the right knee that seems off.


Otherwise, very nice indeed. I love the coloration of her dress and hair. ^_^
  





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Tue Dec 04, 2007 10:56 pm
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It's like Legally Blonde meets Little Red Riding Hood...
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Tue Dec 04, 2007 11:34 pm
Twit says...



That's really good! My only thing is the shoulders need to be more rounded, but apart from that, it's great! :D
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Wed Dec 05, 2007 12:03 am
Via says...



I actually really like the style that this was done in. I usually don't enjoy all the white but I do here. I really do love the style. That said, I still have some negatives:

The shoulders are, indeed, square...as mentioned before.

The arms themselves are really just very stiff looking? And one is bulging slightly near the elbow. The dress lays wierd around the arms, it's also very stiff (the white offshoulder) which doesn't help the arm stiffness.

The legs in general are a little freaky. The pointy calfs really freak me out. And her heels don't have backs? This kind of style makes her legs look like that of an old woman, not a young woman.

Also, watch the skin tone. Her legs are so white compared to her arms and face!

The style though, kind of cartoony yet not at the same time, is great!
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Wed Dec 05, 2007 12:28 am
Wolf says...



ئ twit ئ wrote:That's really good! My only thing is the shoulders need to be more rounded, but apart from that, it's great! :D


Ditto on that. The shoulders are a bit square...you might want to try rounding them a bit.
But other than that, this is great! I love the dress and hair!
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Wed Dec 05, 2007 1:42 am
Gwenevire says...



The shoulders need to be softened up a bit. You need more trees in the forest. And maybe you could make her a little girl with a ripped and muddied dress and dirty feet.
I think that would be cute.
Because personally right now I think she looks a little bit like a slut. :?
  





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Wed Dec 05, 2007 1:47 am
Jennafina says...



Very pretty! I love her facial expression, and how she's holding the flowers. The dress is cute, too, I like the design.

Her legs look disproportionate to me. I think her knees should be higher up, or she'd have really, really long thighs. Also, I think the curves in her legs could be a little less defined.

Your colors are so nice! It looks Easter-y, and fresh. The flowers on the grass are a great touch.

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Fri Dec 07, 2007 6:04 am
Squall says...



The eye lashes and the way the legs were drawn make her seem rather distorted. The colours of shading is rather of. Either go with a certain tone of shades or make it black and white. Lastly, the heels doesn't really fit well with her. It draws away some of the serenity of this piece.
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Sat Dec 08, 2007 9:38 am
chocoholic says...



That's really beautiful. I wish I could draw like that.

The eyes seem a little... disperportioned. Like she has a lazy eye or something.

Overall, I really liked it, now I'm jealous!
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Sat Dec 08, 2007 2:43 pm
HybridHead says...



I love this! Good job! Little little flaws do not bother me for this is where the authenticity comes in. It's not like she's abnormal or anything. Thumbs up!
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