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Kasai Tora 8



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Mon Oct 29, 2007 9:14 pm
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The Misfit Prince says...



last page for the time being, im working on 5 and 6 and then continuing. btw, may be a bit late, but you read them right to left ^^
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Cut my wrists, close me eyes, stab my heart, say your goodbyes X

Here i am, standing there, seeing you in all my prayers.
Take my hand, we'll run away, i love you is all ill say.
  





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Mon Oct 29, 2007 9:17 pm
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The Misfit Prince says...



read right to left
Cut my wrists, close me eyes, stab my heart, say your goodbyes X

Here i am, standing there, seeing you in all my prayers.
Take my hand, we'll run away, i love you is all ill say.
  





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Tue Oct 30, 2007 3:31 pm
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Rydia says...



You need to finish this one before I can critique it properly. The basic outline you have looks nice and I think the bottom frame will be really interesting but finish it off and add the speech and such.
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Fri Nov 02, 2007 1:34 am
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Via says...



I'm with Kitty on this one...there isn't enough here to even make out what it is let alone critique it. Post it up again when it's done a little more.
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