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Mon Oct 29, 2007 9:12 pm
The Misfit Prince says...



missing number 5 and 6 at te moment, unfinished
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Mon Oct 29, 2007 9:17 pm
The Misfit Prince says...



read right to left
Cut my wrists, close me eyes, stab my heart, say your goodbyes X

Here i am, standing there, seeing you in all my prayers.
Take my hand, we'll run away, i love you is all ill say.
  





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Mon Oct 29, 2007 10:21 pm
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Big... I think the red is a bit distracting. It makes it difficult to see what's going on.
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Tue Oct 30, 2007 3:11 pm
Rydia says...



The figure in the first one is good but you need to go over some of your pencil lines, tidy it up a bit and maybe add some more colour or shading. It's rather hard to see what's going on at the moment as Twit said.
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Fri Nov 02, 2007 1:31 am
Via says...



I guess I don't get whats going on here? The first is okay, but I have no idea what's happening. The second frame/box of frames is not clear enough to make anything out of.
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