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Kasai Tora 4



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Mon Oct 29, 2007 9:10 pm
The Misfit Prince says...



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Cut my wrists, close me eyes, stab my heart, say your goodbyes X

Here i am, standing there, seeing you in all my prayers.
Take my hand, we'll run away, i love you is all ill say.
  





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Mon Oct 29, 2007 9:16 pm
The Misfit Prince says...



read right to left
Cut my wrists, close me eyes, stab my heart, say your goodbyes X

Here i am, standing there, seeing you in all my prayers.
Take my hand, we'll run away, i love you is all ill say.
  





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Mon Oct 29, 2007 10:15 pm
Twit says...



"Gattow-chan"?

Chan, this is manga-esque, tho?
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Mon Oct 29, 2007 10:39 pm
Via says...



I guess I'm completely missing the connection between the first frame and the second two? This also needs to be rated, harsh language always needs a rating. Just click on "edit" on your first post in here and it will bring up the edit page and just add a rating.
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Tue Oct 30, 2007 3:29 pm
Rydia says...



I think you need to work on your style a little. You keep varying it. Personally, I preferred it without the coloured background. I think it would be better if you either kept it in black and white and added shading to make them stand out a little more or if you coloured it all in. The drawing of the boy in the top frame is good though. I like the detail on his clothes but the sash and the weapon need more work on the shading and I'm still finding it difficult to follow your plot line.
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