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Fri Oct 19, 2007 5:44 am
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Empress Kat says...



This is Hunter from Dono's story.
I'm very new to this inking business. And I drew too close to the bottom of the page and cut off his boots. Oops.
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Dono also inked this picture... he'll probably be posting his soon.
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Fri Oct 19, 2007 7:35 am
Twit says...



Nice! Well proportioned, ut there's something stiff with his shoulders. And you can see the pencil lines in his very well done hair. :)

Very dramatic.
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Fri Oct 19, 2007 1:11 pm
Via says...



I'll second the shoulderness. But, the rest of it is actually very well done! What pen type did you use?
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Fri Oct 19, 2007 1:23 pm
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I think there is a disproportionate amount of shading on the face compared to the body. It's good though, the face looks a little odd, but all in all it's good.
  





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Sat Oct 20, 2007 4:49 am
scotty.knows says...



The shoulders are a little stiff; round them out a little more. This guy isn't standing at attention on the parade ground, He's showing off his pieces.

The legs could be a little longer too. Maybe I'm looking at it wrong- he might be standing in some fog- but leg-to-body height ratio tends to be about 1:1.

I like the shading, it's pretty good. The windswept hair is good. The pencil lines don't bother me, they make it look like there are real strands in there.

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Sat Oct 20, 2007 6:56 am
Alteran says...



Cool, I hate he's missing his boots, but the top part looks great. He is a little stiff, not to bad, but it could be loosened up a bit. I can't find where his knee meets his thigh, it bothers me cause no one has completely straight legs.

Other than that, looks cool. So dangerous.
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Sat Oct 20, 2007 7:07 am
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He actually has his full upper body flexed. Shoulders, arms, and chest. That explains the size and stiffness of his shoulders...
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Sun Oct 21, 2007 11:10 am
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The hair looks very cool and the starkness of the white and black work with his pose. If you wanted things to be more round/break up the big chunks of dark or light, you could do a tiny bit of crosshatching where you still have pencil lines [folds, lighter shadows, stuff like that]. But that might change the feel of the drawing.
  





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Sun Oct 21, 2007 2:07 pm
Rydia says...



I love the hair and the outfit is very well drawn so long as you ignore the missing boots but I think the shadow for the nose is a little large. Great guns though and excellent work on the hands. It's really very well done!
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Tue Oct 23, 2007 3:35 am
Empress Kat says...



Finally got the gust to try and shade this thing. Advice? Do you like it? And he's suppose to have boots, i drew too close to the bottom of the page... oops me.

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Thu Nov 01, 2007 12:34 am
EnchantressMuffin says...



He's a little bit oddly proportioned, for a person, but the shadowing out helps some. I think that his shoulders are too stiff-looking... now, I could never draw a shoulder very well, but I think that you could. Maybe if you curved them a little? Whatever shoulders do when they're looser. Maybe it's all in how you look at things.

Also... he looks like he's got a little bit of a, well, bosom. I think it's the lines on the shirt. If a guy was wearing a shirt like that, I don't think the fabric would stretch like that.

Hope I made at least some sense. :P

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