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Wed Oct 03, 2007 7:11 pm
Saphira says...



The colour is alittle off because i coloured it with pencil crayons.

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Wed Oct 03, 2007 11:24 pm
carelessaussie13 says...



you can see a lot of charecture and personality in this picture
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Thu Oct 04, 2007 2:17 am
EnchantressMuffin says...



Overall it's a little stiff, especially the tail and hind leg, but it's still nice. I don't like the face much, it looks a little glarey and I don't think any real life lion has a face like that.

Unless you were being conceptual. Then yeah, it rocks.

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Thu Oct 04, 2007 10:21 am
Myth says...



It looks like he's in pain... And the muscle on his back, the bumpy parts, look random. The eyes don't look very lion-ish unless you were going for a cartoon character. Otherwise you've done him very well, better than my attempt at a lioness.
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Thu Oct 04, 2007 11:14 am
Rydia says...



I think the shading could be improved and the others are right about him being stiff but generally he's really good. I like how you've done his paws and the mane is lovely. Some good, bold colours too and the face expression is strange for a lion but I like it. Good work!
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Thu Oct 04, 2007 8:40 pm
Areida says...



He looks like a lion that belongs on a school crest or something. In that light, I like him! :D
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Fri Oct 05, 2007 2:30 am
Alteran says...



I like the head and the body. His tail seems a bit off and the back hind leg is a bit stiff. it needs to be a little more flowing and natural. Overall a really nice drawing. I like the choice of color.
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Fri Oct 05, 2007 11:20 am
Twit says...



I like the mane and face, but the legs are a bit stiff. Nice looking, though. Better than anything I could draw. :)
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Fri Oct 05, 2007 10:21 pm
Frederick101 says...



sweet, its better than i could do. the colors pretty good
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Sat Oct 06, 2007 5:32 am
Teague says...



He does look kind of stiff, especially around the hindquarters. His mane is probably his best feature.

I like the colouring! Very... liony, for lack of a better word. Forgive me. xD

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Sat Oct 06, 2007 4:46 pm
ennui says...



It's not a bad drawing, but the physical coloring is terrible. The shading is all in different directions.
  





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Sat Oct 06, 2007 7:05 pm
Someguy says...



Just two problems:
The coloring. You can see the drawing patterns and there is no shade in the picture.

Overall it is really good. I love the amount of detail you put in.
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Sun Oct 07, 2007 4:41 am
Via says...



I have a few problems areas: the face, the front legs, and the coloring.

The face is very detailed, which is good, but I feel like it's more of a 'humanized' face than a lion face, maybe widen it a little?

The front legs are a little too bowed I think, they do have another joint like a knee there, true it isn't as prominent as the ones in the back but they do exist! Hehe

The coloring does detract from the piece as a whole. The lines in the body are killer, maybe try something else next time like oils or paint or even broad-ranged markers?

Overall though, the detail is nice and it's a wonderful start, just a few nitpicks!
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Tue Oct 09, 2007 3:26 pm
sarahcrosbeh says...



Wow, his mane and face are the best bit. I like this alot.

Maybe work on shading to improve :)

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Mon Nov 12, 2007 11:36 pm
Kim says...



i think it is good, you already mentioned the crayons, so no critique there.
the only thing i would do is raise the back up towards the tail.
but this a very good drawing, i love the face and mane. and you have the body proportioned right with the head. awesome job
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