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Hey ya guys ^^ For all those who have read my fantasy story, Angelsea I: The Last Sentinel, you would know about one of the two currently introduced characters.

This is a pic of Cleo, the Last Sentinel. I decided to take an anime/ cute approach to my story to make it more fresh and unique as a fantasy story rather than being all serious and depressing.



Hope you think she's cute ^^

I'll host more pics for my story. Bye for now

I like her! She looks kind of like a CLAMP character.

She's much too short, though, and her plain dress looks weird with her highly detailed face, hair and staff. I'd give the dress some wrinkles and shading, then go over the entire thing in pen.

Nice work!

Hey! It looks great! Indeed, she does look VERY cute. Her arm that has the staff, however, looks disconnected from the rest of the body.
Other than that, I think it looks great! I love it. I agree with Jennafina on the dress. It looks awesome, but some shading couldn't hurt. Once again, I think she looks great! Keep up the good work!

Wow, she is very cute. ^_^ Her hand looks a bit odd though.

I liked her, but the arm that wasn't holding the staff looked so unnatural. Try to make it belong in the picture.

I think if you conform the sleeve to a more arm like shape it will give it the belonging look.

yeah she is cute.

but something is wrong with the dress.

I love her hair and the staff(?) in her hand. But what is that face in the sky?

First off, I like the way you've draped her hair over her shoulders, and given the anime-esc style her eyes look very nice.

Her right shoulder, since the arm is raised, should also be higher than the left shoulder: you can't raise your arm like that without raising the clavicle. Likewise, her neck is too thin and too straight, and I think it needs to extend further to (our left) her right. The right wrist seems to be bent to the side, which doesn't look natural. It would look better bent to wards her instead, possibly not holding that rod quite so vertically.

Proportionally her skirt is also much too short... take about half of its length and add it on again to the bottom, so that I'm not picturing legs even shorter than her arms. I also wish you'd put more detail into her clothing.

You do, however, manage to get a general feel of the character down, which is nice. and the rod's effect is interesting. Thanks for sharing.

I think I like the head at the top better.
Its cool.
Maybe a bit of colour and some more detail then you will have some art

Why is her collarbone sticking out so much? Why does every hero, or main character have to be skinny and beautiful? God damnitttt. Give us some "unattractive" and slightly overweight main character! Right, I'm going to do that. Sorry I don't mean to be so mean, I think your picture is lovely, I'm just having an Emma moment and seem to be taking it out on you. Sorry. (:

ooh! I really like her face and hair, It's really cool. ^__^ The right arm looks a bit out of place, and now that I'm thinking about it, so does the other one. And why is her armpit so fat?

I think if you added more detail to her body and surroundings, it would look better. The face and head are perfect.

See ya around!

~lupis

Hey, I didn't know you could draw!

This is pretty good, actually. I love the staff, and she is very cute, in an anime-ish kinda way. These are the things that bothered me:

- The arm holding the staff looks kind of fat near the arm-pit, as lupis said. You might want to shave off a bit there. XD
- Her eyebrows look a bit too long, almost as if they wrap around the sides of her head. You might want to shorten them a bit, but it could just be me.
- As Jenna mentioned, you should add more detail to her dress. It looks weird because her face is so detailed and then her dress is really simple and 2-D looking.

And maybe you could make her hair look thicker (add more strands) on the left side? It's nice and voluminous on the right, and the left... not so much.

But overall, neat drawing! Very cool, especially the face in the sky.

Keep it up!

- Camille

The face is really cute. The eyes are perfect--very anime. The hair is also really good, although I think it could use to be thickened up towards her neck. If you make the hair on ether side of her neck darker, it will make the whiteness of her skin pop out more.

Like everyone else said, you should add more detail on her whole outfit. Some shading would be nice, ya?

Also like everyone else said, those sleeves are a little odd. Maybe try making them more tight-fitting? Also, she's missing a hand.

I think you should add her ankles and feet on, too. Otherwise it looks like she has really short legs. XD What kind of shoes will she be wearing??

Conclusion: I can tell that you spent a lot of time on the face--and it's very good. Now, you just need to give some more time to the rest of her. This piece looks unfinished.

Hope this helps!
~Azila~

I think she's really cool and cute! Well done, better than I could ever do!

Keep Drawing!

~D'Aedomir~