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Strong First Sentence



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Sat Jan 28, 2012 12:29 am
creativelyyours says...



Rule: Write a strong first sentence for a novel idea.
Catch: It has to be 20 words or less.
(I borrowed the idea from Writer's Digest 8)

Here's mine:

Pranks were meant to be funny, but nothing was amusing about the hole in my empty pocket sans car keys.
~God is Love. Love like God.~

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Sat Jan 28, 2012 1:31 pm
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Jas says...



If you are reading this, then you are dead.
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~
  





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Sat Jan 28, 2012 3:20 pm
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Charlie II says...



Showtime, thought the blackbird.
I am thankful for laughter, except when milk comes out of my nose.
-- Woody Allen
  





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Sat Jan 28, 2012 3:55 pm
Mikko says...



"Ready?" I didn't wait for her to respond. I simply pulled the gear and that's where it began.
when she needs to shelter from reality she takes a dip in my daydreams
  





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Sat Feb 11, 2012 6:28 pm
MoonlightMayhem says...



It was a going to be a fateful day, and I knew it the moment I saw the darkly clad man peering at me from across the street in downtown Wildavon as I got on the subway, noticing his pale purple eyes penetrating through my core.
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Sun Feb 12, 2012 10:21 am
thatguy1944 says...



Waves crashing against themselves softly faded into scope of consciousness as the warm water lazily drifted around me.
  





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Mon Feb 13, 2012 1:59 pm
SirTobes says...



I held my eyes open, lying there on the ragged, hard concrete knowing that if I fell asleep I wouldn't wake up and would be forgotten, by everyone and myself.
There is no such thing as a stranger. Only friends we haven't met yet.

Previously Just Toby

  





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Sat Feb 18, 2012 9:31 pm
Tenyo says...



YWS has some fantastic writers on here.

"Dad would teach me to make my sincerest promises not to take food without asking- then he'd leave me to starve until I learned to break them."
We were born to be amazing.
  





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Tue Feb 21, 2012 5:43 pm
Paracosm says...



A strong first sentence for a novel idea.

Just kidding! Hmm...

The darkest hour isn't before dawn, it's before death.
Review unto others as you would have others review unto you.

Don't panic!

Also, Shino!
  





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Sat Mar 03, 2012 7:19 am
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AubrielRose says...



Aubriel's turn!....

"I have always been grateful for surviving what we did, but no second has passed by where I haven't wished, so deeply, that we never had to."
  





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Sat Mar 03, 2012 5:01 pm
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EloquentDragon says...



Wow, got some great ones on here.

"Every city has something to hide."

(From my current novel, Third Line Pulse)
No more countin' dollars... we'll be countin' stars.

Enter, if you dare.
  





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Sat Mar 03, 2012 5:50 pm
HomelessPorcupine says...



Every rose has its thorns, and every bald man has his hair cream.
"I can't afford a teddy bear, so I sleep with this contact solution."


Taran: He will not succeed in this. Somehow, we must find a way to escape. We dare not lose hope.

Fflewddur: I agree absolutely, your general idea is excellent; it's only the details that are lacking.
  








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