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Sat Aug 08, 2020 10:18 pm
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starlitmind says...



i feel gentle hugs
from the moon embrace me when
i'm falling asleep
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Sun Aug 09, 2020 5:41 pm
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Hkumar says...



I'm falling asleep
Entering the oblivion
Slowly loosing time
I only put my signature on big cheques.
  





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Sun Aug 09, 2020 9:08 pm
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starlitmind says...



slowly losing track
of time in this endless loop
of quarantine days
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Mon Aug 10, 2020 1:24 pm
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whatchamacallit says...



quarantine days are
a chance to be productive
yet I am lazy.
The best thing to hold onto in life is each other.

Audrey Hepburn
  





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Tue Aug 11, 2020 10:17 am
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starlitmind says...



(xD I love that one)

i am lazy; work
may start to pile up, but
my heart is happy
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Tue Aug 11, 2020 10:49 am
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Vex3330 says...



Loneliness doesn't necessarily
Mean unhappiness
It's nice to have things a little quieter
  





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Tue Aug 11, 2020 5:25 pm
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whatchamacallit says...



this quiet is nice -
I sit under the dripping
tree, after a storm.

Spoiler! :
I love your poem @Vex3330, it's great to have another person join in the haiku fun! Technically what you wrote isn't actually a haiku, though - haikus have 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the next, and 5 in the last.
Right now, your poem is 10-5-11:

Lone-li-ness does-n't ne-ces-sar-i-ly
mean un-hap-pi-ness
It's nice to have things a lit-tle qui-et-er

I hope that makes sense, if not feel free to ask for clarification! :)
The best thing to hold onto in life is each other.

Audrey Hepburn
  





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Tue Aug 11, 2020 6:50 pm
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Vex3330 says...



whoops sorry! i'm kinda new at this but i'll work on that in the future! thanks for the feedback :)
  





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Tue Aug 11, 2020 8:10 pm
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Hkumar says...



after the storm ends,
salvage treasures from the wrecks
and rebuild your world.
I only put my signature on big cheques.
  





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Tue Aug 11, 2020 8:39 pm
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starlitmind says...



rebuilding your world
takes time, but no hurricane
is stronger than you.
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Fri Aug 14, 2020 3:46 pm
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whatchamacallit says...



It's stronger than you,
the ocean, but that doesn't
mean you can't make waves.
The best thing to hold onto in life is each other.

Audrey Hepburn
  





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Fri Aug 14, 2020 3:54 pm
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starlitmind says...



you can't make waves if
the fear of drowning stops you
from touching water.
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Fri Aug 14, 2020 7:43 pm
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Hkumar says...



touching the water,
making ripples that spread out
from your finger tips.
I only put my signature on big cheques.
  





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Tue Aug 25, 2020 6:31 pm
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starlitmind says...



from my fingertips
flows electricity, but
i’m afraid of sparks.
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Sun Aug 30, 2020 1:41 pm
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Hkumar says...



i’m afraid of sparks
flickering from your eyes,
blazing with anger.
I only put my signature on big cheques.
  








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