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Fri Dec 25, 2020 12:50 pm
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Liminality says...



Don't panic. I can explain. Waka or tanka -> 31-syllable poems, written in a continuous line, but later popularised as poems with line breaks in 5-7-5-7-7 pattern.

This thread is just like the haiku thread, except with tanka :D Please use the last line of the tanka before yours as the second line of your tanka. (Modifications made because of differences in syllable counts between haiku and tanka.)

Traditional tanka typically have the following features:
  • mix themes of nature with human feelings
  • have a 'turning point' or a twist in the second last line
  • little to no punctuation

BUT feel free to write non-traditional tanka here as well!

Here is a tanka to start, and I've underlined the line to use:

i read that tanka
were originally sung
in a river stream
which runs loudly gutter-borne
through the streets, the roads to home
  





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Fri Dec 25, 2020 4:07 pm
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Seirre says...



ooh this is so fun! great idea Liminality :)

i am tiptoeing
through the streets, the roads to home -
cracks in the asphalt
match the crinkles in my palm
whispering of the future
u make me go wat cuz u so wat n u can always go what around u watcha

--SpiritedWolfe


< they/she >
  





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Fri Dec 25, 2020 4:26 pm
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Valkyria says...



The loud stars are
whispering of the future-
I find that so odd;
they keep the earth up all night
dancing with the galaxy
Don't just exist; live

-Unknown
  





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Fri Dec 25, 2020 8:52 pm
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InuYosha says...



Nebulas spinning,
Dancing with the galaxy,
Stars shining brightly,
Yoshis eating egg pieces,
Gazing up, skyward, starstruck.

(Don't ask why I used Yoshis. Maybe I should have yoshis in my last line next time heheheheheheheheh)
When life brings you down, don't care at all, because the last thing you want is life being smug over it's victory against you.


-yoshi

[they/them]

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certified yoshi
  





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Sat Dec 26, 2020 8:44 pm
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TypoWithoutCoffee says...



(oops that may be unintentionally hard to follow)

Here I am looking
Gazing up, skyward, starstruck
and all I see is
infinity falling down
it stains your faces not mine
Respect is a valued commodity with high demand and low quantity, so build yourself a fortune by becoming a supplier. - Gem
  





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Sat Dec 26, 2020 9:42 pm
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Valkyria says...



My tears fall freely;
it stains your faces not mine
as puzzles connect
and you all stare at the ground;
mistakes crumble around us.
Don't just exist; live

-Unknown
  





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Sun Dec 27, 2020 3:07 am
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Liminality says...



i watch silent as
mistakes crumble around us,
piling up mountains
on which, the wise grey oaks stretch
stealthily ever upward
  





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Wed Dec 30, 2020 5:05 pm
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InuYosha says...



Creaking, shattering
Stealthily ever upward,
Over the mountains,
Beneath the raging oceans,
The Sun's journey never ends
When life brings you down, don't care at all, because the last thing you want is life being smug over it's victory against you.


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Sun Jan 03, 2021 5:56 pm
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Seirre says...



trapped in the centre
the sun's journey never ends
always stuck spinning
in place — if it stops the world
will come crashing down
u make me go wat cuz u so wat n u can always go what around u watcha

--SpiritedWolfe


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Sun Jan 03, 2021 7:44 pm
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InuYosha says...



Spoiler! :
@whatchamacallit Your last line is five syllables, so I'll use your second-to-last line


We must keep all things
in place-- if it stops the world
from devouring
itself and the rest of us
without reluctant regret
When life brings you down, don't care at all, because the last thing you want is life being smug over it's victory against you.


-yoshi

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Sun Jan 03, 2021 7:54 pm
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Seirre says...



Spoiler! :
@Yoshikrab ah whoops! good catch - I must've miscounted :)
u make me go wat cuz u so wat n u can always go what around u watcha

--SpiritedWolfe


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Sun Jan 03, 2021 10:16 pm
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JoyDark says...



The moon guides the seas
Without reluctant regret
Towards itself, and
Water draws away from land,
Trying to reach a false star.
HELLO

:smt006 :smt006 :smt006


she/her, please
  





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Mon Jan 04, 2021 10:43 am
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Liminality says...



Midnight -- I am out
trying to reach a false star,
hands in thick night air;
by my feet, mimosas bloom,
nearly white on shadowed soil.
  





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Mon Jan 04, 2021 11:30 am
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Hkumar says...



your faded footprints
nearly white on shadowed soil,
left to guide the strayed
through this eternal darkness
into the lights of heaven.
I only put my signature on big cheques.
  





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Mon Jan 04, 2021 3:45 pm
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InuYosha says...



I had gazed, amazed,
into the lights of heaven,
there were shining lights,
filled with eternal smiling,
and ghosts who crossed perfection.
When life brings you down, don't care at all, because the last thing you want is life being smug over it's victory against you.


-yoshi

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certified yoshi
  








Love is so short, forgetting is so long.
— Pablo Neruda