The first scene can be told from either the Wildercat's perspective as Iris approaches the king(she should be very sneaky with this, appearing from the shadows) Or as Iris herself approaches, readying herself for what she is about to do. Then to the wildercat as he see's the king's reaction to what Iris is saying, and then the king's call to action. This is where we will move forward, Iris following them to the Katchy camp and watching in horror at the work of her hands as the wildercat and soldiers destroy the Katchies.(of course she should start out a little hardened but it must at some point hit her pretty hard...perhaps even later down the line)
I was thinking, instead of this could we have it so...
Iris appears from shadows
Wildercat is sent from room
Iris discusses /stuff/ with the king
Wildercat returns with nothing and finds out plans
Iris travels with them to Udairnil
Wildercat and army destroys some stuff
Iris is shocked *gasp*
Amber does whatever was originally planned (couldn't be bothered to read it, heh ^^)
It would just make more sense now that Morsus has to leave, and while he's gone Iris and Malcolm can actually discuss the necklace
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My dear Just, would you like me to continue onwards or are we still deciding on Iris' motive?
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