Young Writers Society

You know Nolan and Corda saw Liz and Bart fight, right? It seems to be missing and I did say you were leaving the Anti-vill classroom...

*sighs* If you don't want to follow through... *shrugs*

Well, the contradiction wasn't really noteable until Corda's last interaction... Now something has to change. Or else the time stream like, explodes or something.

Sooo... the way I see it, Nolan and Corda went into Isaac's office first. They had their discussion with him, then they left and Bart went in, supposedly while they were still arguing in the corridor. He left fairly quickly and streaked past them, around a corner and into a cupboard. He came out a few minutes later, encountered Liz right outside the closet and they, with Alexis, had their scuffle there. Accurate?

Also, this will probably come in handy for those who are sick of trawling the DT for the reference docs.

I would say so, Chibs.

Sooo... the way I see it, Nolan and Corda went into Isaac's office first. They had their discussion with him, then they left and Bart went in, supposedly while they were still arguing in the corridor. He left fairly quickly and streaked past them, around a corner and into a cupboard. He came out a few minutes later, encountered Liz right outside the closet and they, with Alexis, had their scuffle there. Accurate?

That was my intention. Corda and Nolan would have then gone around the corner (because it was in the direction of the dorms) and so witnessed the fight. Sorry if I made things more confusing with my attempt to patch things. >.>

Also, I think it'd be nice if you could compile a list of links to everyone's profiles so we don't need to go trawling the pages to find someone.

So what did people think of the failed experiment scene, involving Arthur, Caroline and a explosion? I would like some kind of critique. Please.

I think it'd be nice if you could compile a list of links to everyone's profiles so we don't need to go trawling the pages to find someone.

Good idea. Check the Everything Page now. XD

skutter11 wrote:So what did people think of the failed experiment scene, involving Arthur, Caroline and a explosion? I would like some kind of critique. Please.

Personally, I felt it was a bit rushed and didn't have much room for other characters to interact with Arthur. What I would have done is spent some time on Arthur's search for ingredients; it would have opened an opportunity for Arthur and at least one of the characters to team up in the search (like Caroline, or someone from the Potions class). The pacing of your posts is also very fast, so slowing it down a little might be a good idea.

Another thing is your punctuation, especially with regards to dialogue, and spelling are a bit iffy. Some spacing in between the paragraphs also wouldn't hurt. Right now, your posts aren't the easiest to read.

@chibibo

Yay! Now all you need to do is add a link to this handy-dandy shiny helpful page to the first post, and I shall be most satisfied. ;P

Lumierre watches as the continuity of the story breaks apart once more around his post.

I give up. -_-

Lumi, your post confuses me. Mind giving a summary of what's going on? Because the continuity fix might just be as simple as changing the time stamp.

Fixed... Sorry about that, guys.

So I just realised I'm a dumbass. 8D

I've been PMing people when they reached 10 posts, therefore they've actually been levelling up on post 11 (and in Kara's case, 21), which wasn't my intention. From now on I'll PM you on 9, 19, 29, etc, and you can level up when you're actually supposed to. ^_____^'

- t3h st00pid

skutter, can you edit your post and make it a bit longer? It's only 157 words long, and you want 200 minimum.

Also, the floating book... Is this intended to be your level 1 power? You've only made 5 posts so your character is still at level 0.

Sorry about that, I got a bit carried away, that sort of happens a lot. I'll fix that!

Um, Dreamy...you do realize the dean is basicly Superman? It would be far from "easy" for a kid, at level 0, to kill Superman.