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Reign of Darkness



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Sat Mar 14, 2009 11:22 pm
StolenHearts. says...



oh my goodness!
you guys! two whole pages of the story without me!
how rude D:
lol what should i have maribelle do...hmmm.
-goes to think-
She could get killed and turn into a ghost again, only this time she's a howler. The only person she won't dare to harm is Damien. This time host solution won't work, how will she come back or will she fade away.

good? or should i think more?
  





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Sat Mar 14, 2009 11:44 pm
TexanWriter says...



LOSE MARIBELLE? ARE YOU INSANE?!?!

Calm down, Tex... she was jsut throwing out ideas...

Ahem, no, I think you need ti think more. Maybe... off the top of my head, in no way saying you should listen to me...

she could end up being a triple agent.
she could be captured and brainwashed.


Uh, if you don't want any of these, let me know, 'cause I'll use one for Kelly!

Also, we jsut write. You're the one who didn't post yesterday! :lol:
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Sat Mar 14, 2009 11:51 pm
StolenHearts. says...



XDDDDD
Lol tex
everyone likes maribelle that much o.o
it seemed as if she wasn't a very important character :oops:
thats a good idea actually
i love the brainwashed thing
like the shadows instead of TAKING her
they decide it'd be easier if she just led her friends to them???
  





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Sun Mar 15, 2009 12:36 am
TexanWriter says...



Oooo yeah!

And when you only have nine characters, every single one is importent.
Religion without science is lame; science without religion is blind.

Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the the universe.

Education is what remains after one has forgotten everything he learned in school.

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Sun Mar 15, 2009 12:39 am
StolenHearts. says...



lol
okayy okayyy
it's just some characters in our story like give the whole feel of being the main ones.
I feel like maribelle is just a side link which makes me want to work a lot hard to get her doing better things.
  





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Sun Mar 15, 2009 12:45 am
TexanWriter says...



Yeah, it seems that way to me, too.

Making Maribelle do something dramatic, or having something dramatic happen to her, will definently shoot her up on the chart. Plus, this is weirdly made up of four girls and one boy, bolt. Drama is going to help :)

THE GUY IN NEW YORK:
[spoiler]He is a professor in paranoiaologly or whatever. ESP and shadows ( :wink: ) and superpowers. He doesn't have his own powers, but he knows more about them (and shadows!) than probably anyone else. After we talk to him and learn to trust him (which'll take maybe... an hour?) they get attacked by shadows, they lose professor haven't-decided-his-name-yet, and this would be a good point for some dramatic happenings? *wink wink* [/spoiler]
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Sun Mar 15, 2009 7:04 pm
JustDance says...



Bahaha...but wait wasn't Joseph gonna get brain-washed?
Or just decide to go evil on his own. ??
I'm gonna do something to Julie...which will cause her to have sucidal thoughts...very very soon. Mwaaahhhh!!!!
  





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Sat Mar 28, 2009 5:48 pm
TexanWriter says...



LaReina had the idea that the shadows would be defeated and then Joseph would come along and, being turned to the bad guys side, raise up an army of machines to fight.

I didn't have an idea.

JustDance had the idea to make the shadows just dissapear, then come back even stronger.

Uhhh... what does everyone think?
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Sat Mar 28, 2009 5:48 pm
JustDance says...



I agree with Bolt.
Somethng I would recommend is doing a sequel like StolenHearts said.
Bascially if Bolt doesn't mind staying in for just a few more tiny posts we can have something happen like kill of all the shadows or suddenly they all dissapear.
Now the charcter's have nothing to worry abour right?
WRONG!
So they all leave everyone & go back to their normal lives, leaving their unfinished love, friendship, etc. storiea behind.
So don't make the character's fall in love just yet.
Now the shadows didn't exactly go...
They just went back to get stronger & better then ever...& I mean A LOT stronger.
So now the teens come back & realize it's up to them to save the world...
but thiss time it's going to be a lot harder, a lot bloodier, & a whole lot of drama.
So there is the sequel.

Ahahahaa I don't think it's the best idea..but that's all I got. (:
  





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Sat Mar 28, 2009 10:18 pm
StolenHearts. says...



Great idea dance!
I'm not sure why you don't think so!
But, I seriously wanna get more action packed and make it more wanted to read!
That's why I'd love to add a male character, he's going to be a baddie.
ooooooooooohhh I'm soo excited >w<;;
But the baddie's going to come into mari's normal life and they are going to become friends
but when the gang gets back together. Nobody likes mister baddie O;;;;;;;
OMG
:'DDDD
  





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Sun Mar 29, 2009 1:05 am
JustDance says...



Thankss! (:
Like your idea too! (:
Maybee I'll makee one too! (:
  





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Mon Mar 30, 2009 12:05 pm
Flux says...



The sequel is good ... but let's finish this first. I like the draggy and slow. It allows more emotion, and captures the reader better than short, pointless posts! Let's finish this first, okay? We have such a plot built up! :(
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person.

Give him a mask and he will tell you the truth."

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Fri Apr 03, 2009 2:52 am
JustDance says...



yeah(:
  





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Tue May 12, 2009 9:44 pm
TexanWriter says...



Story finished. This discussion thread is no longer in use.
Religion without science is lame; science without religion is blind.

Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the the universe.

Education is what remains after one has forgotten everything he learned in school.

-Albert Einstein
  








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