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Mon Oct 19, 2020 10:59 am
HarryHardy says...



It looks great!!

I think we just have the one pirate left now.
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Mon Oct 19, 2020 12:27 pm
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IamI says...



I like that idea, maybe John could decide to make their heist on Harpy's planet specifically because he wanted get Harpy's attention. Does that work?
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Mon Oct 19, 2020 9:27 pm
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HGsomeone says...



Ooh, yes that’s an excellent idea :D

But to build on it further...
*holds up another LEGO brick*
It’s been twenty years since the crew’s last heist so I’m assuming that they’re all (including harpy) going to be a bit rusty. So, what if, on their first attempt it doesn’t exactly go to plan. They’re all a little uncoordinated, it takes a few tries for the ship’s engine to start and they only just manage to escape before the local police arrive (I’m just imaging the police shaking their heads and thinking “amateurs”). Then in the end, when they’re counting up the loot it only turns out to be 7 chips, 43 quots and a lollipop.

Personally, I think it might add a touch of humour or else support the fact that they haven’t done this for a long time, but really it’s all up to the rest of you.
  





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Thu Oct 22, 2020 3:22 pm
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Yeah that'd be a cool idea!
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Thu Oct 22, 2020 11:35 pm
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I think that would be really funny, and if it seems a little unrealistic, we could just explain it away by saying the rob ships, not banks, it just wouldn't be something they're used to.

in other words: good idea!
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Sun Oct 25, 2020 5:22 am
HarryHardy says...



That sounds great!!

Aaand who's supposed to go next?
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Sun Oct 25, 2020 5:56 am
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HGsomeone says...



I think it’s @Lia5Giba and then it goes onto the law enforcement, is that right?
  





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Sun Oct 25, 2020 8:04 am
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JasmineFelicia says...



I believe so.
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Mon Oct 26, 2020 10:24 am
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IamI says...



@Lia5Giba I like the new part! I especially like the extra detail you added.

@HGsomeone yes, then it’s your bounty hunter.

Do we know where the pirates are going to meet up?
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Mon Oct 26, 2020 12:45 pm
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HarryHardy says...



@Lia5Giba, that was great!!

Guess its my turn now...I'm going to fit both of them into one big post because they're basically going to be together the whole time...:)...mostly introducing the duo...
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Fri Oct 30, 2020 11:27 pm
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IamI says...



@HarryHardy, not trying to badger you, but how's the post coming along?
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Sat Oct 31, 2020 12:49 am
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HarryHardy says...



Hey...no problem!! I'm the one who always badgers everyone else.

It's coming along nicely...taking a bit longer than I thought because I've been busy but it should be done soon. :)
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Sat Oct 31, 2020 12:51 am
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IamI says...



Okay, sounds good!
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Thu Nov 05, 2020 3:28 am
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HarryHardy says...



Hey dropping in here to let you guys know the post is still happening!! With the start of NaNo its been crawling along slowly but it should be up soon!!

Sorry to keep you all waiting!!
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Thu Nov 05, 2020 12:06 pm
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IamI says...



It's fine! I've been really busy myself, no rush.
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