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'The Odin', Part One: Finding the Odin DT



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Sun Oct 04, 2020 12:53 am
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IamI says...



Finished. Going to edit and post tomorrow. I'm going to sleep now.
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Sun Oct 04, 2020 1:53 pm
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IamI says...



It's up! may be just a little long, but I'm happy with it.

Also, what kind of role do you think John's wife and child should play? I'm not too sure myself and I'm interested to hear your ideas.
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Sun Oct 04, 2020 6:05 pm
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LittleLee says...



It looks good! I intended for the disc to be a tracker, but a holo-disk will do. What is that, though?
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Sun Oct 04, 2020 9:52 pm
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IamI says...



It’s basically a phone but with a hologram thingy, about the size of a drink coaster. Also, I believe I mentioned Blaze’s holo-disk was custom, so it could probably have a tracker built into it.

If you have any more questions feel free to ask.
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Mon Oct 05, 2020 12:09 am
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HGsomeone says...



So who’s up next?
  





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Mon Oct 05, 2020 12:38 am
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IamI says...



The only thing I really have to say is that I want the rest of the pirates to go, then the police, then the other bounty hunter, and that all the pirates’ parts should either end with or incorporate a call from John to tie the story together.
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Tue Oct 06, 2020 6:27 am
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HGsomeone says...



Cool, well I'm happy to go after whichever pirate wants to go next
  





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Tue Oct 06, 2020 7:40 pm
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JasmineFelicia says...



Can I just say I very much enjoy the line "It's happened!" "You had another child?". I guess maybe I could go next. If I go next should Peter receive the call from John, and start heading out and getting his own family ready to go or something?
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Tue Oct 06, 2020 10:12 pm
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IamI says...



I’d be fine with you going next. I think it would be best to have the call come in at the middle or the end of the post, so we can get and idea of why he would agree to get back in.

Thanks for the compliment, by the way. I’m sure I stole that bit from somewhere but I can’t put my finger on where.
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Wed Oct 07, 2020 6:28 am
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HarryHardy says...



Sorry I only just now got to read the post. It was amazing!
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Wed Oct 07, 2020 10:03 am
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JasmineFelicia says...



Mkay! I'll get started on my post! Hopefully it'll be done by Friday this week or Monday next!
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Wed Oct 07, 2020 1:36 pm
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JasmineFelicia says...



I have a question. What age should Lucky have had his first child at? I was thinking 28, or something, but I'm having trouble getting the time straight.
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Wed Oct 07, 2020 3:39 pm
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IamI says...



That’s up to you, I feel like 28 would probably be a bit young, since at that age he would probably be with ‘the Odin’ for the first time. I think it would be interesting to have the child be born sometime during lucky’s first time with the Odin.

Also, just tossing out ideas, since the child would be fully grown by the time of the story, maybe lucky could have to rejoin the Odin to help the child out.

Also also, just some clarification, the events of the storybook take place 40 years after the crew’s first spree as ‘the Odin’.
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Wed Oct 07, 2020 4:13 pm
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JasmineFelicia says...



Mkay. Could I up my characters age to 50? Also, a robot appears in my writing, if that's fine, and I have this random name K-1991. Don't know whether I should change the name or anything.
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Wed Oct 07, 2020 4:20 pm
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LittleLee says...



Isn't 40 years a bit too much tho?
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