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Mon Jul 15, 2019 8:26 pm
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winterwolf0100 says...



I have a couple questions. I've started writing the first post, and need people's opinions on some things so we can all be on the same page.
1) What do you think the Conclave headquarters looks like/where is it located in your mind? Forest, cave, mountains, huge creepy mansion on a hill? You name it, it's an option, so I want to make sure everyone agrees with what I write.
2) WHY is the Conclave placing spies (Malik included) inside the group? There are several possible options, so I'll list a few:
a. The secret person is actually one of their warriors and they don't want it being revealed.
b. They want to reach the person first, so they are trying to place red herrings and basically throw the group off track.
c. For some reason, they are wanting to kill the group members.
d. They are trying to recruit some of the group members.

Please, anyone a part of this storybook, it would greatly help me if you could just leave your thoughts on these questions. It is very much appreciated!

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Tue Jul 16, 2019 2:31 pm
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ScarlettFire says...



Well, the location is on the map in the main SB post, so go check that out, everyone! And I like to imagine it's inside the mountain? Probably a nice dark, damp cave? Low lighting, shadowy corners, etc, etc. You get the idea, lol.

Secondly, they're placing spies within the Council and the group because that's what they've always done... And probably because they're worried the Council are onto them? They obviously don't like how the Council does things and I imagine there was a pretty huge disagreement between the Original Conclave Members (who may still be alive, bc dark magic, hello) and the Original Council Members (who are probably all dead).

Also, all of the above reasons in @winterwolf0100's post, tbh. XD
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Sun Jul 21, 2019 6:20 am
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ScarlettFire says...





I'd just like to let you all know that I'd prefer third person, past tense! If you don't mind trying to stick to that, please do so. Past present is okay, but can we please try to avoid first person, at least? Thanks, guys!

ALSO, we're 100 points away from the next level!
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Tue Jul 23, 2019 7:52 am
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AstralHunter says...



That's perfectly fine by me, Scarlett! Third person-past tense is my preferred narrating style anyway, so I'm perfectly happy with that. (First person unnerves me a little because of how personal it is. I'm naturally unused to that degree of familiarity with the protagonist. XD)
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Fri Jul 26, 2019 10:51 pm
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winterwolf0100 says...



Hello everyone! I would appreciate if everyone could read the first post before I actually post it to the storybook. The link below will allow you to comment on different parts. If you see any grammatical errors, PLEASE let me know! It would really be appreciated! I will send the link through Discord as well. Thank you!!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1TAy ... sp=sharing
  





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Thu Aug 01, 2019 9:50 am
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AstralHunter says...



Already gave the requested feedback via Discord! It's a good post, but I'll reserve any commentary on its content until you've officially submitted it.
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Wed Aug 14, 2019 11:32 am
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AstralHunter says...



Yas, the post is finally up! @winterwolf0100, I'll comment on your post a little later. @ScarlettFire, do you plan on extending the SB challenge, since we'll only be able to start completing it now?
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ScarlettFire says...



Oh, yes, I do! I'll update soon! Probably tomorrow.
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Magestorrow says...



Your challenge has expired! I hope I'll be seeing more from this storybook in the future - it looks like it was a very interesting one. :)

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Omnom says...



Cool post, winter! A quick note: all dragons have the ability to share senses with their Imbued, as that's just a power that comes with being imbued to a dragon.

@ScarlettFire question: what's your idea regarding the intro posts for the Council? I have to admit that I'm a little lost as to where to start writing at the moment.
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Yeah me too.
  





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Featherstone says...



I'm so sorry to do this, especially since the spots are limited, but I just don't think I can hold up this SB. I was really hoping to but life has sort of smacked me in the faceand it's simply not doable atm, so unfortunately I have to drop.

I apologize again for the trouble!
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