Young Writers Society

@CONCORD!!!!!!!!!

I'm so happy to welcome concord to the team and that we'll have some Adina pov posts from now on!!! SO MUCH EXCITEMENT!! Concord's all caught up too on reading all the posts?? AMAZING.

WECOME ABOARD @CONCORD!!!!!!!

Thank you both very much : DDDDD

I really do hope to do Adina justice and I really love this SB so XD

THAT IS INCREDIBLE NEWS!!! <3 <3 <3

Ayyy welcome to the crew!

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@Featherstone @Wolfical @Lael @sherlockhson

The Outlands: Broken Trust and What Remains
A possibility of 2 points!

1. How is your character feeling about Rose and her bogus plan to "clear her name" and sell out James? How are they feeling about Kaia in light of this and her recently joining the group? In general, how are they feeling in the midst of the drama/conflict and who and what are they concerned about?
2. Have your character open up in light of the conflict. Be it to share how they relate, understand, or share why they feel the way they do, and what's keeping them from reconciliation - any openness is good! Does the drama bring up any past hurts? Feel free to dip into that!

Completion Time: 7 posts!

Good luck, Outlanders!

This challenge thought it could evade the watchful eyes of the pirates who rule the seven seas. Hah! Its overdue expiration serves as an example of what happens to those who attempt to defy our law.

Y'all I've started reading and I'm loving it so far! I haven't finished the first page but I like all of the personalities coming out so far! You are all great writers from last year xD

I dooo have some notes if you all wanna hear them because I just can't help myself XD

Aaaa another reader! :0 My last-year self thanks you, @Omnom!!

AYY @OMNOM,, thank u n bless u sm :,)

And heck if u wanna give commentary you can here in the dt if you want lol. All of the first page is like, a year ago, and I think we’ve all improved in writing since then haha but yasssssss, u can tell ussss

Alllllllrighty then Page 1 thoughts!

-Can I just say I like the personalities of the bad guys? Badass bad guys? Badass bad guys.

-I think it's cool that the chase for these people are cut short! I'm not gonna lie, when I first started out, I was wondering how long it was going to be until everyone got together. Short and sweet.

-Ari is amazing. Ari, I want to give you a hug.

-So, these posts skip around with their perspectives a lot. It's confusing, at first, and even now that I'm almost to the second page (I'm going back and adding my reactions xD) it's still confusing and drags me out of the story sometimes. It also muddles some of the story continuities later on (I'll talk more about that below )

-Rosaleen is a spitfire xD and I love that James is an unironic cowboy that refuses to admit it. You very clearly set the foundation of all of these characters' personalities.

-Are these stickers like the only food in this land? XD

-Adina is adorable, but I do have to say that she changes personalities a couple of times within the first page. I'm sure this was just transition problems between different writers and a not clear personality, but it does show.

-A problematic side effect of all the perspective changes is the fact that everyone seems to know James' name now, or at least that's how it seems. (I've had that problem too, which one of the characters in Shattered Moons who didn't reveal his name to half the cast for awhile. It was hard to keep up with) but there's changes here from James to Tiberius that Rosaleen knows to Philip. You tried to fix it with a side note in one of the posts, but it's too late at that point xD a lot of the posts had James' name as James, so the readers expect everyone to know him as James.

-The fight scene is top notch, and creative! Fight scenes are hard to write, so bravo

-I don't like Kaia right now, boooooo Kaia XD

-I like how you put the collaborators in the post title, that's a cool idea that I may adopt for my SBs

-Whyyyyy Rosaleen?! I mean, I get why, but your best bet right now is with this group, not with someone who is clearly a bounty hunter of sorts. anyone with a completely clear head would understand that. You can't trust anyone right now, but as long as you have information over the group (or one person in it right now) you have an advantage. I refuse to believe she's gonna rat him out.

-K I T T Y

@OMNOM I HAVE MEANT TO REPLY TO THIS THOROUGHLY BUT i been w/family all week so AAAAAAAAAA IMMA JUST SCREEM FOR A MINUTE !!! I LOV U!!!

HONESTLY lol I feel u!! Adina was inconsistent in the beginning and it is a big sad but I hope she kinda levels-out personality-wise and gets more consistent. I feel like in some ways she's gotten a bit one-note on the second page but I'm hoping w/concord taking over we'll see more development from her!!!

ALSO I FEEL U ON THE perspective changes. That's something, that, if I ever had the time and motivation for I would go back and edit lol for consistency's sake. And I mean like, the switches w/in posts (not just posts in general, cuz I'm pretty sure you're talking about w/in posts).

AND LOL stickers are just.... iconic lol idk we just keep bringing them in. They started as a ripoff snickers for a joke and just... stuck around BA DUM TSH.

AND HONESTLY THAT FIGHT SCENE IN THE BEGINNING?? THAT WAS ALL FEATHER!! FEATHER IS AMAZING

AND OOF lol yeah the whole... James name thing... that was so poorly explained. I LONG TO GO BACK AND like... make that whole thing more clear but at this point I'm just like :,) we just gonna move forward for now bois. That's legit confusing tho lol.

ALSO IM GLAD YOU LIKE THE BADDIES.... all the bounty hunters in the beginning (not KAia!!) are from my main story,,, and I,, love them..... bless u

AND LOL Rose is.... Rose,,, : ))))

@Featherstone //pokety poke

YES RIGHT OKAY

Does this weekend work for you, @soundofmind/anyone else who wants to collab?

I could probably make it!

@Featherstone I could probs make it! Let me know the day and times you're looking at!