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Sat Feb 11, 2017 9:53 pm
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Ninlil says...



Just posted. Hopefully, it isn't full of awkward formulations. As an excuse, I wrote a four-hour german exam today, so my English is a little rusty.
  





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Sat Feb 11, 2017 11:59 pm
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Hey, um, I'm back and realized I've missed a lot so I've gotta catch up but it may take me a bit. I'll definitely try to catch up quickly.
  





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Sun Feb 12, 2017 12:30 am
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XxXTheSwordsmanXxX says...



@Eternity

Not as much as you would think. To help you out. I believe that Ursus has stayed at the school and a group has left to get supplies.
  





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Sun Feb 12, 2017 3:13 am
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Dracula says...



I added some NPCs. Anyone can use them and they can die quickly.
I bought a cactus. A week later it died. I got depressed because I thought Damn, I am less nurturing than a desert.
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Sun Feb 12, 2017 9:18 am
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Snoops says...



I am glad we have characters that are going to die quickly :) hahahah
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Sun Feb 12, 2017 4:27 pm
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Snoops says...



I just posted! It's very quick! So sorry! (LOTS AND LOTS OF TESTS!)

@Dracula

Do you like what I did with Charlie? Do you want me to change it? I most definitely can if you want!

Does anyone else want me to change anything?

I left it like that because I didn't know what way we should go. Maybe have them steal? Run as fast at they can? Zombies come in and the cashiers leave? They have to answer a riddle? Honestly I don't know...
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Sun Feb 12, 2017 5:12 pm
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I just realised that the gate was knocked over, so I shouldn't have been able to turn it into a store roller door thingy. Sorry! Depending on what Lau has written, I'll fix my post in the morning. My bad.
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Sun Feb 12, 2017 5:15 pm
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@Lau2001

Though I'm not sure Charlie would hit another character just for saying something cheeky (it's fine though) I'm happy with everything else. She would be very nervous about speaking up, maybe even stumble on her words, but I'll add those feelings in my next post and work with it.
I bought a cactus. A week later it died. I got depressed because I thought Damn, I am less nurturing than a desert.
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Sun Feb 12, 2017 8:42 pm
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@Dracula

I can edit it if you want? Just tell me if you have any ideas.

I really want Thomas and Charlie to become good friends? What do you think about that?

(by the way I love your username! Dracula is absolutely fang-tastic!)
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Sun Feb 12, 2017 10:14 pm
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Dracula says...



Okay, if you don't mind editing, you could get rid of that first smack at 'Because of that I got a hard slap on the back of my head.
“Thomas!”, Charlie said. ' He could just hear her 'worried, quiet, hissing' or something like that from behind him.

“Look! This is the apocalypse. We need food or we might die! There are more people waiting for it back at the school”, Charlie said, trying to sound reasonable. Well, as reasonable as you can be when you say the words “apocalypse” and “die”. Oddly enough, she was probably making an understatement.
Here, I doubt she'd use an exclamation mark. She would be pleading with them, sounding desperate, but not that loud.

“What are you going to do? Live here for the rest of the Apocalypse? Most of the food here will go bad. And you can't eat it all.” I said.
Unfortunately, I got another bruise on my neck.
“Could you please stop hitting me?”, I said to Charlie.
“Can you please stop being mean to them?”, she said.
She can hit him there. I think she would've built up enough courage by then to be very annoyed by his making things harder. Also, this incident will probably help them to become friends.

Thanks, @Lau2001. :D I want her to be courageous, just not too fast.

@XxXTheSwordsmanXxX Did you edit the gate post or was I imagining things? Either way, thanks. It all makes sense now.
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Mon Feb 13, 2017 7:26 am
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@Dracula

Ohhhh!!! I like it more this way! Thanks for the help! I have a test like right now! (Wish me luck) and then I will edit when I get back!
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Mon Feb 13, 2017 7:31 am
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Dracula says...



Good luck! @Lau2001
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Mon Feb 13, 2017 6:21 pm
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@Dracula

I edited it. Is it better this way? Tell me please!

(by the way the test went well! Thank you for the luck!)
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Mon Feb 13, 2017 8:41 pm
Dracula says...



That's great news, @Lau2001! And I love the edits.
I bought a cactus. A week later it died. I got depressed because I thought Damn, I am less nurturing than a desert.
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