Whoever wants to post next, go for it. I have an Evaric post I'm working on, but it can come after whoever posts next.
@LordZeus, did you want Quint to catch up with Adrid and Asha as Adrid carries the redhead out of the alley? You also have Evaric to talk to, if that's something you'd find interesting. If not... *shrugs*
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@ScarlettFire posted. I sorted it out. I apologize if it sounds weird, its been a long time since I've written. I also launched a city-wide search for Arryn, I hope that's okay with you, I'll take it out if it isn't.
@LordZeus it doesn't quite mesh with what happened in the last post? Adrid last had Asha in her arms and was heading for the Guard's Quarters. I don't know when she would've had time to chase down the other thug? Might want to change that part to Galbraith or another guard interacting with Quint? I imagine the one Quint trips would be the first thug to be carted off--who would already be handcuffed when Quint trips him. Then he can probably follow Galbraith back to the wagon to find one guard dead, a second one being put in the prison wagon....and Adrid holding Asha?
Other than that first part of your post, it looks good. Just try to get the first part to reflect the previous two posts better. Of course, having Quint looking for Arryn is fine... I just noticed he mentions a blood mage killed the four men. Pretty sure they wouldn't know it was a blood mage for sure, but it can be assumed. So yeah, that's fine by me, too.
Uh, yeah. That first scene needs fixing, but otherwise it works.
As for posting; whoever wants to post next, go for it. You'll see an Evaric one soon. He's going to be a bit of a creepy lurker, though. So fair warning.
"With friends like you, who needs a medical license?" - Paimon, Aether's Heart
“It's easier to ask forgiveness than it is to get permission.” - Grace Hopper.
@ScarlettFire added some corrections. Hope it's okay now.
@Remembrance sorry forgot to mention you earlier. Asha is now in the palace infirmary. Torrin and Quint will be visiting her soon. I hope that's okay with you.
Just as a statement. Gordon would not take a permanent position within the castle. Explaining why he isn't aging after 50 years or why he suddenly has to leave would be a bit of an issue with him being a dragon that can live for thousands of years.
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