Great thanks. Btw guys please recall that in an earlier post I mentioned that someone had been in the bAthroom and overheard the discussion between Luke and Myrtle over the Dark Mark (See my first post, seven posts down on page 4 for reference). Since they didn't specifically mention th Dark Mark just saying 'The Mark' as well as not saying anything really specific about it that person would have a suspicion about Luke. I would really like that to be a PC. So of anyone would like their character to be that person, please tell me.
@Vellichor You could just have your character start showing up to classes and extracurricular activities like she's always been there, or, if you want to excuse why she wasn't there, you can just make something up like recovering from a curse or magical sickness or something.
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@ty7lucky the inclusion of the Half Blood Prince's journal is a tad far-fetched. And I really can't buy the way the Hufflepuffs bully Gavin so badly. I don't think Hufflepuffs would be that pointlessly cruel. I could imagine them teasing him, but not cornering him in the bathroom and cursing him. Even though they didn't know what sectumsempra did, they must have assumed it was a curse, as it's under 'For Enemies.' I also can't understand why people keep picking on Gavin in the first place. Why is seemingly everyone against him?
You can still have him be bullied, but it would be nice if it was more understandable.
I liked the duel scene you wrote, though. I thought it was creative, the way it worked, with Gavin's spell being unreliable and Luke beating him in an opening. And the way he replied to Luke after the duel shows me that Gavin is a good sport. It's good that you're not afraid to make your character lose in some things, in fact it's important that a character doesn't win all the time, though maybe in the future you might want to let him succeed sometimes, so his life isn't all doom and gloom.
Anyway, sorry if this was a bit much for just a short post.
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Posted! Just a small one to keep the ball rolling. I interacted mostly with an NPC and Clara @Nike, sorry! I also made small mentions of your characters, @KiraThePotatoChip and @Vellichor. Just a couple thoughts. I promise to have more character interactions in my next post. Sorry if it sounds weird, or if it's a mess, I did it late at night, which is what time of day it is for me now.
I am definitely going for Draco planting this seed in everyone's head that she is faking all of this when she is actually not. Him trying to break up all of these new relationships she has finally been able to form.
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@Remington38 I like your last post, with all the friendship funtimes. Warms my cold writer's heart. I'll try to reply within the next four or five days, but I'm really busy in life at the moment, so no promises.
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Great posts guys! Just one thing @Nike, Harry didn't get his new broom until his old one broke after the incident at the Quidditch match, which hasn't happened yet.
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