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Wed Mar 27, 2024 5:49 pm
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Ventomology says...



Spoiler! :
Ahhhh thank you Mint!!! Honestly I just want to be silly haha. I'm glad people enjoy it.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Thu Mar 28, 2024 4:17 am
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Some NaPo InSpo

(lol did you see what I did there)

"Workin' Hard" by Fujii Kaze

"Early Autumn" sung by Ella Fitzgerald

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"Too Sweet" by Hozier

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The Hudson River School

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Enriq Miralles

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...Might explain myself later. Might not. We'll see haha.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Sun Mar 31, 2024 9:50 pm
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Warm-up Five | Goals you Can't Complete

Enspoilered for like... the barest of forbidden grape juice content.

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Pile it all in the instant pot,
the carrots, the onions, the beef.
Set it. Forget it. Go off to work.
Come home and eat stew in relief.

Pile it all underneath my heart,
the worry, the goals, and the grief.
Set it. Regret it. Work way too hard.
Get tipsy on the aperitif.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Tue Apr 02, 2024 2:40 am
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Free Song Groove:

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edit: lol was looking at this and realized those sixteenth rests in the treble clef should be eights. haha whoops.
Last edited by Ventomology on Wed Apr 03, 2024 12:56 am, edited 1 time in total.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Tue Apr 02, 2024 10:54 pm
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Chao Mien Western Update

#1 No Ordinary Town Out West (includes snippets from Something Wrong, Seek Your Fortune)

“Western whistle” into a “trotting” banjo riff

COWBOY 1:
THIS IS NO ORDINARY TOWN OUT WEST
THE RIVER RUNS WIDE THROUGH THE VALLEYS AND CRESTS
THERE NEVER WAS MORE MAJESTIC SIGHT I CONFESS
THIS IS NO ORDINARY TOWN OUT WEST

(Cowboy gestures, and set pieces move in, people begin filling the stage, going about their days. Tempo picks up slightly.)

TOWNSPEOPLE 1 & 2:
THIS IS NO ORDINARY PLACE TO BE

SALOON GIRL:
(Spoken in time) I control your dreams.

RANCHER:
(Spoken in time) And I turn milk into cheese!

ALL SO FAR:
THE BARBER SEES YOUR BONES WHILE HE IS PULLING YOUR TEETH
WE’RE ALL MYSTERIOUS-

(Music drops out, freeze ensemble, spot on Mingzhu as she emerges from the crowd. Slow, at her tempo.)

MINGZHU:
EXCEPT FOR ME

(Speed up to a gallop, everyone back in motion, ensemble covers her up, at this point entire ensemble should be on stage singing. Also key change haha)

ENSEMBLE:
THIS IS NO ORDINARY TOWN AT ALL
THE CITIZENS ARE NOTHING SHORT OF MAGICAL
OUR POWERS GIVE US PRIDE TO RIDE THE WILDS STRONG AND TALL
IT’S QUITE AN EXTRA-ORDINARY TOWN FOR ALL

(Ensemble freezes, vamp as MINGZHU steps out again)

MINGZHU:
IS THERE SOMETHING WRONG WITH ME?
WHO LEFT ME HERE INSIDE THIS FANTASY?
I’M NOTHING MORE THAN NORMAL FAR AS I CAN SEE
SO PLEASE, SOMEONE COME TO TOWN AND SET ME FREE

(Mingzhu leaves stage)

RANCHER:
Who was that?

PROSPECTOR:
I reckon I’ve seen her before.

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And then uhhhh a little more dialogue, another verse, and then into the "Seek Your Fortune" trio? Lol idk. Thoughts are welcome I have no idea what I'm doing.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Wed Apr 03, 2024 3:46 am
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Intro + Outro Lyrics:

The wind
brushes my skin,
and the fir trees sway.
I drive
along I-5
by the light of day.

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A lot happens musically

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The wind
brushes my skin,
and the corn fields sway.
I cry
tears of goodbye
as I'm on my way.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Wed Apr 03, 2024 3:48 pm
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Wednesday Haiku 1: 04/03

What April showers?
Snowflakes fly flat as the plains
and bring May flooding.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Thu Apr 04, 2024 2:48 am
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Free song verse take one:

See the apple orchard from the highway
fruit so red and ripe it must be gourmet
Bite in through the skin and feel the juice spray
Time keeps driving forward wish I could stay
here
another year.
Dear
My roots grew deep I fear.

"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Thu Apr 04, 2024 3:21 am
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TheSilverFox says...



Spoiler! :
yooo the drop at the end, you've got a great range + know how to make lines pop
S'io credesse che mia risposta fosse
a persona che mai tornasse al mondo,
questa fiamma staria senza piu scosse.
Ma per ciò che giammai di questo fondo
non tornò vivo alcun, s'i' odo il vero,
senza tema d'infamia ti rispondo.

Inferno, Canto 27, l 61-66.




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Thu Apr 04, 2024 3:54 am
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Free Poem 1: things I know how to say

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I can't say much. My mom taught me enough so that
I can say
I can say a little Chinese.


Spoiler! :
Ran across @Plume's excellent bilingual poetry thread that you should all go look at and this popped into my head.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Fri Apr 05, 2024 1:43 pm
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Free Song: Home Again Lyrics

The wind
kisses my skin,
and the fir trees sway.
I drive
along I-5
by the light of day.

See the apple orchard from the highway
fruit so red and ripe it must be gourmet
Bite in through the skin and feel the juice spray
Time keeps driving forward wish I could stay
here
another year.
Dear
my roots grew deep I fear.

(optional spot for instrumental + improv)

The plain
Midwest terrain
never called to me.
My mind
is left behind
as my heart runs free.

(modulate up to new key)

The wind
kisses my skin
as I fall again.
I rinse
I’m not convinced
that this cycle ends.

Never did I dream I’d love the flatness
of the rolling plains or know the vastness
of these people’s hearts. I’m such a hot mess,
didn’t think I’d repeat all that sadness
here
I drip with tears.
Dear
my roots grew deep I fear!

The wind
kisses my skin
and the corn fields sway.
I cry
tears of goodbye
as I drive away.

(cymbal wash and sigh)
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Fri Apr 05, 2024 2:08 pm
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CapybarasAndCoffee says...



I love it!
I also like songwriting
ENTJ ~ Witty ~ Christian ~ Funny ~ Honest ~ Teen ~ Author ~ Baby Boomer In A Gen Z's Body




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alliyah says...



Love love love "things I know how to say" <3 Bi-lingual poetry is so interesting, and especially so when the subject is language itself. It feels like art + poetry together, and your writing is very beautiful. Love the variety of mediums and music you have included too. Certainly looking forward to following along this month Vent!
you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now
but i have promised to return




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Sat Apr 06, 2024 3:33 am
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@alliyah Chinese poetry actually has a very long history of being a visual art! It was combined with calligraphy for so long that they are in some ways hard to separate in the culture. That and wordplay! I only wish I was good enough to include some of the many, many homophones that exist in Mandarin and other Sinitic languages.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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Oh my gosh!! You have so many fascinating poems. Your song is beautiful and tells a great story of nostalgia and falling in love with a place you’re doomed to leave. Beautiful <33
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If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.
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