Young Writers Society

Oh gosh, I look away for a minute and look at all this FABULOUS poetry that continues to pop up in this thread! I don't even know which ones to quote since I like them all.

I'm especially loving the paragraph poetry vibes.

The picture of the person you paint in poem 4 is so clear and thorough and poetic - and especially the opening line is just perfect, "he stays up til 1 just so he can watch the sky breath" the poem feels like speeding through a town where you just barely have time to take in all the buildings and people and then suddenly you've seen everything but all at once. And then the turn at the end to speaking in first person is a nice twist / perspective change too.

poem 5 is very relatable with the feeling of "looking from the outside" at all the seemingly perfect-happy couples. And the whole metaphor of poem 6 of lacking gravity / control is really well done too.

And also love your phrasing here: "a moony silhouette of nose sloping to forehead" such an interesting way to describe that, but in a good inventive way that paints a vivid picture to me. Looking forward to reading more!

@alliyah oh my goodness thank you! <3 I always have fun when I write paragraph poems :') I wasn't planning on that much prose poetry in a row, honestly, but often when I have little to no inspo I find it the easiest way to get past that.

CHA-WHAT???!!!!! YOUR THREAD??? obsessed obsessed OBSESSED!!!
every single poem in your thread is mine and everyone else's favorite that is the law
also I'm going to parrot everyone who's commented on your thread by saying that I am head over heels in love with the tone and pacing of your poetry, it's quite literally a fever dream, gold rush
Speaking of gold rush, poem 8. tetherlessness reminds me of the song, gold rush, by TSwift - a high compliment, as you would know my love for the artist.
AND RAILWAY VOWS IS SO CUTE!!!! AHHH!! you describe it so deliciously well I can visualise it all in my head. And it also fits cohesively with all your other poetry in the sense that it has that fast paced series and flashes of imagery and emotion and longing- AH!!! i am hungry and devouring your poetry!!!
Anyway, this was less of a comment and even lesser of a review and more of a big gush and rant over how much I love your poetic voice and metaphors - and I am always waiting with bated breath for more!
*insert quotations of all your poems right back at you because I LOVE THEM ALL SO MUCH OH MY GOD PUBLISH THIS AS A BOOK PLEASE*
Keep up the phenomenal work!! <333

@Euphory OMG YOU GEM YOU SINGLE-HANDEDLY MOTIVATED ME TO FINISH NAPO or at least finish my goal of 15 poems.

Seriously, though, thank you for so many lovely compliments. :') I'm so glad you enjoy my poetry!

Ah!!!! Big congratulations on completing your goal hatch! You had to go for a mad-dash at the end here too it looks like - but I like the poems it produced! The astronauts log perspective is really compelling and a perfect set-up for the poem. And the theme of the juxtaposition of distance vs closeness in your poems is really intriguing to think about - this line especially makes me think: "i imagine when you are years away i might begin to understand again." The whole astronaut log poem I really really enjoyed reading though.

The casual progression of the notes-app poem is really interesting and creates a jolting reading experience - also this is true for me too that there's like grocery lists next to love poems next to a rant next to a life-epiphany all together - and it feels really organic and yet striking.

poem 15 really captures all those themes of your thread together and i love the scientific / distanced tone of the speaker for something that is still so intimate / emotional. Also the conclusion for that one was perfection: "perhaps at some point, before this all began, we all already met each other. We do not begin in isolation -- we begin with a rendezvous."

Thanks for sharing your poetry! I've enjoyed it reading it as I always do. You are such a talented poet, and I've enjoyed seeing your experimentations with different formatting and voices this NaPo too along with the beautiful, powerful hatch-imagery that I always expect to see. <3