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Tue Apr 25, 2023 7:08 pm
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momonster says...



6.


i don't know if you think about me,
cause i think of you every day.
the pain, the lack of memories,
it keeps me up at night.
i've forgiven you for what you've done,
but i still have this anger for you
in my heart.
how can someone be flesh and blood
and still a stranger?
  





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Fri Apr 28, 2023 5:08 pm
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Euphory says...



Spoiler! :
poem 5 hits way. too. hard. The agony of not knowing what is real and what is in your head, the constant internal contradictions - you've done a wonderful job putting all those universal emotions and doubts into words <3
AND 6!!! ahhhhhh heartbreak heartbreak heartbreak. The last two lines STING
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momonster says...



Spoiler! :
@Euphory i love you so much thank you <333
For sin shall no longer be your master, because you are not under the law, but under grace.
Romans 6:14 NIV

never apologize for standing up for what you believe in.

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Fri Apr 28, 2023 6:43 pm
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momonster says...



7.


TW: b*dy dym*rph*a, r*pe, d*ath

a toddler taking her first steps,
carefully stumbling,
her parents cheering her on.

a young girl playing with her mother's makeup,
hoping she doesn't get caught.
full of innocence and wonder.

a teenager crying, hating her body,
wishing anything she was anything
than what she is.

a teenager sitting on her bed,
heart hollow, tears running down her cheeks;
she is numb, and her eyes see nothing.

a young woman looking at her pregnant belly,
full of anticipation and fear for her child,
and the life to come.

a mother nursing her baby, tears running down her face,
her whole life has changed,
and she doesn't know what to do.

a mother playing house with her daughter,
pretending a perfect life,
and forgetting the world for just a moment

a mother dressing her daughter for her first day of school,
both full of excitement and nerves
for this new stage of life.

a mother sobbing inconsolably, holding her daughter's dolls.
a life is gone before it began,
and the pain is irreversible.

a heartbroken woman praying to a god
she never believed in,
trying to change her life.

a new woman dressing for church,
a smile on her face as she worships;
she has found peace.
For sin shall no longer be your master, because you are not under the law, but under grace.
Romans 6:14 NIV

never apologize for standing up for what you believe in.

previously MomoandAppa, LordMomo, MomoMajesty, and dancingontheclouds
  





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Sat Apr 29, 2023 9:41 pm
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Euphory says...



Spoiler! :
MOMO. POEM 7. IT IS SCALDING. IT IS PAINFUL.
And the ending is what is most poignant, that after all of it, she finds peace and joy and AH!!!! had me in tears there.
But also??? This collage of everyday, mundane life moments that you put together with big milestones and achievements is such a perfect way to go about this- young girl playing with her mother's makeup, mother playing house with her daughter, clutching dolls upon her death, all these small little flashes of someone - it's just. Breathtaking how you managed to pack so much emotion in so little. <333
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Mon May 01, 2023 3:55 am
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niteowl says...



Spoiler! :
coming here to comment because you commented on my thread. Really enjoyed these! #3 and #4 were my favorites-the cloud poem perfectly encapsulated that sort of liminal space between youthful optimism and adult cynicism. And #6 -the line "how can someone be flesh and blood but still a stranger" really resonated with me because it's how i feel about my family a lot of the time. Great job and keep writing! <3
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alliyah says...



Spoiler! :
Poem 6 absolutely broke my heart <3 Beautiful poem. Each one of your poems has so much emotion and heart in it, well done this month momo!
you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now
but i have promised to return
  





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momonster says...



Spoiler! :
@niteowl @Euphory @alliyah thank you so much for your comments! i'm glad you enjoyed reading <3
For sin shall no longer be your master, because you are not under the law, but under grace.
Romans 6:14 NIV

never apologize for standing up for what you believe in.

previously MomoandAppa, LordMomo, MomoMajesty, and dancingontheclouds
  








I lingered round them, under that benign sky: watched the moths fluttering among the heath and harebells, listened to the soft wind breathing through the grass, and wondered how any one could ever imagine unquiet slumbers for the sleepers in that quiet earth.
— Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights