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echoes in the margins



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Fri Apr 23, 2021 2:26 pm
Liminality says...



Hiya @AtlasWut! I love the voice in 'let’s hang out'. It manages to be nonchalant and casual without losing its poetic edge and feeling. My favourite lines were "we actually ended up paying too much/ for spaghetti and steaks" because it conveys the twist or turn of the poem in a very grounded way.

That same casual vibe I also noticed in the first stanza of 'in theory', which contrasts really well with that second stanza! The parallels between the two are striking and cleverly done~
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