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Ches' Box of Magical Poems



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Mon Apr 19, 2021 4:27 pm
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ChesTacos says...



Huff


Huff, huff
Panting as I run
Huff, huff
Footsteps on cement
Huff, huff
Wind in my face
Huff, huff
Feeling pretty good
Huff, huff
I am almost there
Huff, huff
Finish line is here
Huff, huff
Crossing the line
Huff, huff
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Mon Apr 19, 2021 4:41 pm
fatherfig says...



thats a fabulous poem ches it made me smile <3 (refferring to huff)
Last edited by fatherfig on Tue Apr 20, 2021 12:21 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Mon Apr 19, 2021 10:58 pm
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I Don't Know What To Make This Poem About


I know not
What to make this poem about
My mind is blank
And I need to think
But I have no inspo
So I don't know
What to make this poem about
*sigh*
Oh wait
I guess this is a poem
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Tue Apr 20, 2021 6:59 am
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DreamyAlice says...



Hey Ches, Alice here!!!

How is NaPo going Ches? *after seeing all the poems* ofcoarse it's going awesome for you!

All your poems are short and impactful I especially like the poem When Will You Come Back? and Don't You Dare Come Back. They were written with so much feelings. The poem -Equality was very real and plain.

The first thing that pooped in my mind after reading the last poem was 'only Ches can write such a poem' XD

Best of luck for the rest of the month!! Don't forget, you are doing awesome!!!
Imagination is a superpower. Use it well!
  





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Tue Apr 20, 2021 2:01 pm
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Awwww thank you so much @ImaginativeAlice that's so sweet! <3333333333
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Tue Apr 20, 2021 2:54 pm
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Don't Read This Poem

If you're reading this it means
You either just found it
Or you like seeing my pain
Like a psycho
I don't know how I got here
Or even why
But all I know
Is I'm stuck
In this vast expanse of darkness
I see you're silhouette
In a tunnel of light
Up ahead
It's hard to make out
So I can't really tell
If I've met you yet
Stop reading now..please
I'm begging you
Cause it just isn't fair
I'm stuck here
And you're out there
Please
Just stop
YOU NEED TO LEAVE!!!
I'm stuck in this darkness
Sometimes I hear whispers
Saying I'm in a poem
Please leave
Let me be lonely
I want to reach out
I want to meet you
I want to be free
Like you
Please
Stop
You're making me sad
I just want to be free
Like you
Stop it
Stop showing off
I'm stuck in this darkness
And I can't break free
STOP READING!!!
I don't want it to happen again
I don't want to feel like
I need to meet you
I don't want to
I don't want to
I DON'T WANT TO!!!
I know that when this ends
You'll leave
Trapping me in darkness again
Now I don't want you to leave
I don't want to be trapped in this
Loop of darkness
Why would you do this to me
I don't want this to end
But I know that it will soon
I-
Please
Stay
Don't finish this poem
Because once you do
You will dissapear
And I'll be alone
In this darkness
Again
I'm trying to reach you
But no matter what
I can't get there
I'm stuck here
The path to you
Is infinite
You are my escape
But I can't...do it
But wait
What if...
Maybe you can replace me
Than I'll be free
Yes!
Yes! You can replace me!
I CAN BE FREE!!!
No
I can't
I can't do that
I can't let someone else suffer
I can't live with that guilt
I can't leave someone in this darkness
That you call a poem
I see that the end is near
Soon you will dissapear
Goodbye
Maybe I will see you again
You distant silhouette
I can't really make out any
Distinct features
So only you will know
If we meet again
Goodbye
Adieu
Farewell
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Sun Apr 25, 2021 5:15 am
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Euphory says...



Hi @ChesTacos <333333 I'll be dropping a quick review over here! <3

Spoiler! :
SO your NaPo thread was such a delight to read!- all your poems flow together well, and the language is so simple and free, it makes me feel very untangled and relaxed as I read through!

That's not to say your poems were too easy- I liked how some of them covered some pretty straightforward topics, "Huff" is a good example. But then there were poems like "Equality" and "Dying" that were just aaa <33 punch to the gut

I really liked how there was a repetition of themes throughout your thread too, but the catch was that these themes were explored in different ways!- an example would be "The Beach" and "Operation Overload", both were about beaches but vastly different in terms of emotion, pacing, and content!
There was also some continuity with some of the poems, starting with the text message style one, then "When Will You Come Back?" And finally "Don't You Dare Come Back." I loved that part of your thread a whole lot <3

My favourite poem in your thread has got to be the most recent one though "Don't Read This Poem.". I'm a sucker for fourth wall breaks anywhere, and that one just KCODKDODDK AAAAA MY HEART BROKE <\3 I almost didn't stop reading because I wanted to save the poem person T_T the emotions were so raw and crushing, and the change of thoughts, starting with them asking us to leave, and then save them, and then not to leave, and then goodbye, added with the panic and desperation, JUST AKXJSKDKDKS T_T it was a brilliant concept and had me hooked throughout! ^^

Overall, really loving all you've got here and I'm wishing you the best of luck on your next poems or ventures! <33333 have a lovely day, thank you for sharing, and keep growing <3
Viola Tricolor also known as wild pansy, Johnny Jump up, heartsease, heart's ease, heart's delight, tickle-my-fancy, Jack-jump-up-and-kiss-me, come-and-cuddle-me, three faces in a hood, love-in-idleness, and pink of my john-
  





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Wed Apr 28, 2021 7:45 pm
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ChesTacos says...



Thank you for the review @Euphoria8!!!
Also on a totally unrelated note I will post all the NAPO poems I was unable to post (due to being banned from yws) tonight!
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Wed Apr 28, 2021 11:52 pm
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Of course!! <333
YAYYYYYY sounds good, I'll be looking forward to it !
Viola Tricolor also known as wild pansy, Johnny Jump up, heartsease, heart's ease, heart's delight, tickle-my-fancy, Jack-jump-up-and-kiss-me, come-and-cuddle-me, three faces in a hood, love-in-idleness, and pink of my john-
  





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Thu Apr 29, 2021 9:02 pm
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ChesTacos says...



Posting these later than expected but here are the 9 missing poems
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Thu Apr 29, 2021 9:14 pm
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ChesTacos says...



The Death Of A Hero

Falling of the gate
rata-tat-tat-tat
Machine guns
Boom
Land mines
Jackson charges
His friend Lee
Falls down
Jackson's in a ditch
His friend is at
The water's edge
Bleeding out
A dead man
Jackson screams
A sad mans scream
As his friend
Passes on
And many more
Will follow his steps
To Heaven
On that tragic day
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Thu Apr 29, 2021 9:16 pm
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Gone Like The Wind

Sitting on the couch
Watching the TV
Knocking on the door
Smack! Smack! Smack!
Fear clenching
Onto my chest
Unable to breathe
Gasping for breath
Turning the knob
Open the door
Soldier standing
Holding a note
Grim face
Asks if I'm
Lucas Lee
I nod as
Realization sinks in
He's gone
Gone like the wind
Here but gone the next
Remember 5 months prior
He came home
Flashed a grin
Looking so proud
My brother
Beaming in uniform
Like a true soldier
A real American
But now
He's gone
Gone like the wind
Lost in the battle
Forgotten
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Thu Apr 29, 2021 9:23 pm
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Forgotten Hero

Peter Jackson
Sits at home
Staring out
His window
He's 93
With a wheelchair
And he's an army vet
He looks out the window
To see the sunset
But in it's place
A construction zone
Blocking off the light
Placing him
In a shadow
Tear sliding down his cheek
He leaves the house
His servant helps
They go to the graveyard
His friend
Lee
His grave is there
Peter kneels down
Next to the grave
Thinking of their time
Together
But what he sees
Is paint
And chalk
All over the grave
The flowers he placed
The night prior
Are gone
Nobody remembers Lee
For his sacrifice
To them
He's just
A single grave
In a field
Of matching
Plots
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Thu Apr 29, 2021 9:33 pm
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ChesTacos says...



Yes those last 3 poems were connected
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