Young Writers Society

I hope this thread doesn't stay empty. Though I won't be sticking to a particular theme but still I have a few ideas on how this is going to come out as. Fingers crossed. <3

<3 @Hkumar thats a wonderful poem with which to start off napo.
My favourite lines are :

"Not everyone can steer
through these giant waves" &
"But still I ride and navigate
through the high rising tides"

also

" But beware of the living horrors,
creatures from my haunted past
lurking in the dreary trenches
to guard those precious treasures."

Okay maybe I love all the lines.

Thanks @queenshadowgem <3

Oh, wow, I really love that third stanza...

All thanks to our disrupted
circadian clock that broke
after a history of negligence
kicking in the nocturnal mode.

These are all interesting poems with some clever metaphorical turns. Keep it up and hang in there <3

5.)

Shadow
unlit, dusky
growing, shrinking, stalking
an emotionless replica,
silhouette

Aah H all the poems in this thread are so raw and beautiful <3 You do such a wonderful job of conveying really intense emotions as images in all these poems. (Also on a purely aesthetic level I love the different font colours you've chosen for your poems, they match each individual poem so nicely!)

I think one of my absolute favourite images you've used so far is this one:

never be that fallen star
which was lost in the dust
and forgotten with time.

but gahhh they're all really poignant :)

Scars carved on my heart
will never heal with time

I think this summarizes beautifully that pain and grief aren't always just intense, temporary pain and metaphorical bleeding, they also have a longer and less immediately obvious effect <33

I also really love the simplicity of your cinquain, you chose some super strong description words - I especially enjoyed "unlit, dusky" and "growing, shrinking, stalking" but eep it's all beautiful!

Keep up the incredible poeting, H <333

7.)

your footsteps left behind
across the white sand shining
silvery under the moonlight
leading me to your new home
they vanish into the sea-shore
but i can feel your presence
somewhere on the other side
but worry not my beloved sister
we'll reunite once again very soon
for it was death that brought us apart
and in death shall we meet once again.

8.)

stress taking over
fidgeting like lunatic
yes, biting nails help.