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on castles and cupboards



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Fri Mar 05, 2021 3:10 am
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Spearmint says...



A castle:
Spoiler! :
Image

A cupboard:
Spoiler! :
Image

just whatever poetry i feel like in the moment ^-^

~my napo goals~
- write poetry every day, for a total of at least 30 poems! C:
- do at least 5 poem collabs, and at least 5 poetry jams too! :]
- experiment with aesthetics in my poems (maybe add images? :>)
- try out different poetry forms (e.g. limerick, sonnet, etc.) ^-^
- read and comment on at least 30 threads! (probably more though :D)
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~table of contents~

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{1} 4/1

beginning

staring at a blank sheet of paper
pencil over the page
scared of messing up
this pristine piece of white

afraid of
slipping outside the lines
what if i don't like it?
anything short of perfection
i've got to do my best

just...
do something
i know, i know
ahhh--

a scribble darkens the page
slanting curves and
uneven tones
far from perfect

but... now i'm free
to make beauty from this mess
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Fri Apr 02, 2021 4:00 pm
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{2} 4/2

mushroom mansion

in a forest not-so-far away,
in a world not too different from yours
there is a mushroom

and on this red-and-white mushroom
is a mansion of miniscule proportions
tiny towers and little lines,
diminutive doors and compact chimneys

but whyever is this mushroom here?
...well that's a mystery i suppose
the mushroom mansion mystery :P
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{3} 4/2

the attic

light seeps through the grimy window
illuminating particles of dust
free-floating in the stagnant air

once there were memories here
happy ones, treasured like those moments before dawn
and if you look, maybe you'll find their ghosts
dancing a silent dance in the dark
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Sat Apr 03, 2021 3:59 am
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"mushroom mansion" is the cutest little poem, and the last stanza is perfection xD I also love the grand use of the emoticon at the end, that was a wonderful way to finish it off :p

I love the theme and message in your last one; there's always something haunting about finding / looking back at old memories of things / people that are no longer here, and I think your word choice was lovely in portraying that chilling-ness <33 I also love the imagery in the first stanza, with the grimy window and particles and stagnant air

I love reading your poems, mint, you are doing wonderful!! <33
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MapleWay says...



Since me, you, and Momo are NaPo buddies I thought I would drop by with my opinion on all of your poems so far!

Spoiler! :
Beginning

I really liked the topic of this one! The line, "afraid of slipping outside the lines" Really grabbed my attention. Great poem! Wouldn't change a thing!

Mushroom Mansion

I really liked the topic of this one too! The woodsy feel added a lot and I enjoyed the orange title you used! Great poem! Wouldn't change a thing!

The Attic

The imagery in this one was fantastic! I could totally feel the musty atmosphere and see all of the old boxes. My favorite line was, "illuminating particles of dust." I could see the faint glow coming in from the window so well! Really great poem! Would change a thing!

Keep on writing! You're doing great! :D
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ahhh thank you so much @starlitmind and @MapleWay!!!! ^-^ I super appreciate the encouragement! and yay hello NaPo buddy, I'll be sure to comment on your poems too tomorrow! once again, thank you both for the wonderfully lovely words!!! :D
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{4} 4/3

celery

oh, how you crunch
so satisfactorily,
spurting your evil delicious juice
into my mouth

and i hate love the way
no sauce can cover up your taste
your (wonderful) bitterness
is always there <3

Spoiler! :
prompt from @AtlasWut: “make a list of things you don't like (broccoli, snow, writers block, etc) then pick one and write a poem romanticizing it” C:
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Oh man, the celery! I'm so happy you chose it. The way you were able to romanticize it, but your dislike for it shone through, added a really neat, humorous touch!

celery/10
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ooh yay, a celery/10!! XD thanks so much for the comment, and also for the wonderful prompt!! ^-^
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{5} 4/4

ramblings

why is it
that poetry is often sad?
somehow people become eloquent
when talking about pain
and humorous poems seem to
take so much effort
in contrast
but being funny is hard i suppose
what makes people laugh?
well, what makes them cry?
i don't know
but these are just some
random ramblings
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{6} 4/4

scattered

golden flashes fill the air
pale petals floating to the ground
fireworks in the distance
the clouds are lavender tonight
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{7} 4/5

insignificant

loneliness
like a smothering fleece blanket
draped over my limbs
but this blanket doesn't bring comfort
i can't feel its softness
and i'm folding inwards like origami paper
in the hands of a clumsy child

is anyone out there? can you hear me?
i feel invisible, a mere second in the
endless eons of the universe
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alliyah says...



Ah the ways you're developing some of these seemingly simple images is really wonderful! In particular this last one, I just love,
i can't feel its softness
and i'm folding inwards like origami paper
in the hands of a clumsy child

I always have a soft-spot for origami in poetry, and I love the metaphor with lonliness, it's creative and fascinating and heartbreaking.

I also enjoy that you're doing some experimentation with different formatting like with the strike-throughs, and definitely a lot of variety in voice from the silly, to the anxious, to the sad. <33

Keep it up minty!!
you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now
but i have promised to return
  








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