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Sun Apr 12, 2020 3:23 am
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alliyah says...



I agree with Liminality that you did a great job portraying a sort of breathless quality in "Panic Attacks" that really resonates with the theme. Looking forward to reading more of your work! :)
you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now
but i have promised to return
  





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Tue Apr 14, 2020 9:18 pm
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bpmzcpl says...



Choking is the night
Far off is the light
All seems to be lost
The journey will cost
Is it all worth it?
Star, size of a bit.
Just outside my grasp
The dream. Just a gasp
From so far away.
The path is soft clay
Unmolded, uncharted
Now that I’ve started
It goes on forever.
Fear I must sever
And reach up to Mars
Then onto the stars.
One day longer,
A little bit stronger
  





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Wed Apr 15, 2020 9:20 pm
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bpmzcpl says...



Life once known
Again torn away
Further it’s thrown
Why can’t it stay?

My face once tear-streaked
Is now dry as stone.
My interest no longer peaked
No longer adding to the cyclone.

To the change, I am numb.
It just keeps happening
To acceptance, I succumb.
It is no longer maddening.

Tears used to be the glue
That held me in place
Without the tears, I flew
Nothing can keep me in that case

What happens is what will be
That is all I have to know.
With that knowledge, I’m free.
I’ve learned to go with the flow.
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Thu Apr 16, 2020 1:15 am
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Nerves are high
Butterflies fluttering
My stomach swirling.
I can’t do anything
Tomorrow I’ll know
No going back
Tomorrow will determine
What my future holds.

I want to know
But at the same time
I don’t - I don’t
Ignorance keeps me safe
From disappointment
But also from the possibility
The possibility that I might
Just might succeed.

All that work
These days now past
Leading up to this.
Are they all for nothing?
Or will they add up to something?
No way to know until tomorrow
Tomorrow - I’m scared
It is all such a risk

Palms tingle, my feet cold
My brain cluttered
All doubts and worries
Hope trying to slip through
Tiny cracks forming
It is exhilarating
Just as it is unsettling
I almost want time to stop.

I want to let myself
Hope - I wish I could
Fear that it won’t happen
Keeps me far from the cracks
They say expect the worst;
Hope for the best.
My brain tries to suppress
My heart smuggling hope.

Live in the now.
That is what I try
One day at a time
It is so hard, it hurts
Long for the future
Wish for the past
But I am glued
Glued to the present

Time moves on
Despite my wishes, my pleas
Tomorrow will come.
The wait feels like forever
But comes in a blink of an eye
I can, I can’t
I will, I won’t
Stuck, such a useless quandary

Despite what happens
I know that I will move on
The future turned present
Will become normal
As I worry over the next future
It won’t be as bad as I think
Always things are better after
In the before, the biggest agony.
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Tue Apr 21, 2020 3:34 am
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bpmzcpl says...



The moon is a reflector.
It shares the light of another,
Not able to create its own.
But yet, it isn't as harsh as the sun.
It is gentle.
Once I was like the moon.
I could only reflect others' light.
I lived on the praise -
Light of everyone around me.
Sure I was gentle,
But I was also submissive - not my own.
Now I'm becoming a star
With a fiery light inside.
I am learning to be me
Light is starting to show.
Sure it may be a little harsher,
But it is raw - it is all me.
I don't have to be around other stars to shine
I can shine alone and I finally see me.
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Wed Apr 22, 2020 3:55 am
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bpmzcpl says...



I hate crying. I know,
But tears are normal.
Expressing that inside
Something is broken.
A leak that runs
Touching the ground.
Overflow of a dam
Clouds rent open
Downpour of truth
Raw, open thoughts
It is not weak
To cry is bold.
Visible the vulnerable
So long kept inside.
Healing drops,
Okay to fall.
Tears are normal
To cry is bold.
One day longer,
A little bit stronger
  





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Thu Apr 23, 2020 12:51 am
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Liminality says...



I've been enjoying the imagery in these poems, especially how you used the contrasts between the "moon" and a "star" to develop the narrative. There's also something about the shape of the lines in your poems that I really like. I think it's how distinct the ends are, the use of capital letters and punctuation - gives the tone a sort of strong undercurrent. Keep it up <3
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Thu Apr 23, 2020 1:27 am
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bpmzcpl says...



Formatting is kinda weird on this one, but it is visual so...

Cracks
There was time when I thought
All is good - good in the world
Good with me - me happy living
But life took a turn - turn around
Looking back there - there are shadows
Once hidden - hidden on the coming
Revealed all now - now I see grey
Not all is dark, light - light of fire
Burns past views - views that I change
I am different - different is the path
I now go to take - take it all away
The painful knowledge - knowledge tells
Truth that hurts - hurts and cracks
Thought I when time was there.
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Thu Apr 23, 2020 1:52 am
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mckaylaam says...



Ooo your latest poem, Cracks, is really interesting! I love how you set it up, especially with the last line being a repeat of the first but flipped. I can see the emotion you put behind your other writing as well, I really like it! Great job, and keep up the good work :)

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or maybe it's the thought of not being so alone."


  





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Thu Apr 23, 2020 2:13 am
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bpmzcpl says...



Paint with all the colors.
Heavy and rich.
Brushing strokes are tailors
Smooth, no glitch.

Cover the truth in layers
Thick and dark.
That without sunlight withers,
Burns with a spark

No one sees beyond the mask
Rough and fake.
Skin rubbed raw, I didn’t ask
For break and ache.

Even before the mask I wore,
No one saw me or my core.
One day longer,
A little bit stronger
  





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Thu Apr 23, 2020 2:42 am
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bpmzcpl says...



This stop can’t -
Time wanders in helpless
Change is messy.
Life slow, not too good
But challenge around every bend
Around
Flip
Around
Bend every around challenge but
Good too, not slow, life.
Messy is change
Helpless, in wanders time.
Can’t stop this.
One day longer,
A little bit stronger
  





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Thu Apr 23, 2020 3:42 am
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Time ticks, trickling through tiny tears.
This time, trying to transpire, true - tangible, tactile
Taunting ticking, terrible ticking, tedious ticking
Trying to tenderly talk, telling the time
Trading to target tardiness
Teaching that time turns tightly, thoroughly
Time to tell, time to travel, time to test this
Thrashing, Throbbing, thrumming.
Tick, tock, tap, tut, tsk
Trekking, travelling toward tomorrow
Tiny terrific tint - this time to treasure.
One day longer,
A little bit stronger
  





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Sat Apr 25, 2020 4:23 am
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bpmzcpl says...



An atlas assembled -
An allegory announced
All about an actuality,
Anyone acquiring appetite.
As asked anyway,
Already actions arrive
An adventure awaits
Attention, ability, achievement
Attend along an aisle
Accompanying aspirations
Achievement and accomplishment.
Among animated array,
Alongside always allies,
Arrive at appropriate area -
Appreciated and advised.
One day longer,
A little bit stronger
  





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Tue Apr 28, 2020 2:42 am
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Liminality says...



I love how you're experimenting with more poetic forms <3 The tautograms are really impressive, and I particularly enjoyed the rhythm in "Time ticks". 'Cracks' was super creative as well - I like how you used the dashes to make both a visual and rhythmic 'cracking' effect!
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Tue Apr 28, 2020 7:39 pm
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I am the first me.
There is no one else I can be.
I’ve always wanted to be something other.
But me my efforts smother
I want to be free.
Reaching deep
Inside I find my soul in a heap.
Bits and pieces strewn about every which way.
My inattention caused the splay
Recovery is steep.
My inattention caused the splay
Bits and pieces strewn about every which way.
Inside I find my soul in a heap.
Reaching deep
I want to be free.
But me my efforts smother
I’ve always wanted to be something other.
There is no one else I can be.
I am the first me.
One day longer,
A little bit stronger
  








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