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Wed Apr 15, 2020 2:09 am
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Judgment

She has been falling
all her life and only
now, at the end, she
has decided that this
is what she wants.
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The moon

The forest is sick
in a way that is difficult
to parse; it is the same but
it is not. The sun is at an angle
it has never been before and
the trees that were once trees
are not anymore, and perhaps
they never were. It is like walking
in a dream and the Sentinel
is asleep.


See also: The moon (2019)
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Wed Apr 15, 2020 11:51 pm
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Ten of cups

There are girls in the forest, feet
bare on the moss and solstice
cool on their tongues. The veil grows
thinner here, the two forests reaching
for one another, trees interlocking branches,
sisters, trimmed in fairy lights and flower
crowns. There are girls in the forest, but
they are not girls, they are women set free
from expectation. They will remember soft
white dresses brushing knees and hair braided
with fireflies with the sweetness
of a dream.


See also: Ten of cups (2019)
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Fri Apr 17, 2020 11:11 am
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I remember this novel idea, and I remember that I loved it - both the 2019 poems and the little bits of novel that you shared.

It's really interesting having the 2020 and 2019 poems side by side! I think both sets are great, though different: for example, the sun: the 2020 version paints a more explicit picture, which feels quite bittersweet, a mix of regrets and making peace; the 2019 version is a lot simpler, (and about the other character, I think?) but in that simplicity really packs a punch.

I looove the slightly uncanny scene in the 2020 the moon - the lines about the sun and the trees does some very cool stuff illustrating what is by describing what it's not, and there's a little bit of internal rhyme in there which kind of subtly ties the sun and the trees together in their uncanniness.
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Sun Apr 19, 2020 4:12 pm
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Spoiler! :
Thanks, @Cadi! I briefly considered re-drawing if I drew a card I drew last year, but I'm glad I didn't do that. I also think it's incredibly interesting to see how I've approached the same card each time. I think I was a lot closer to the story in 2019 (I haven't actively thought about it in quite a long time, with other projects coming before it on my to-write list), but I'm enjoying coming back to it in this way. I'm glad you're enjoying it!


Eight of coins

Wax the cottage floor with lavender
and beeswax, wrenched from
a swarming hive in a thunder of stings that will
burn in her sleep despite her aloe-slick skin that
slips against the wood of the cottage floor, waxed with
lavender and beeswax bribed from a discordant
hive with a secret that will become a prayer over
time spent waxing the cottage floor with lavender
and beeswax promised by a hive that has come to
love a woman over a century of rosebuds and clover
paired with sweat and memories that belonged to
another girl.
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Sun Apr 19, 2020 4:33 pm
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The world

She stands on top
of this life she has
built, tender in its
imperfect beauty.
There is no higher
she can climb; the
only way forward is
to leave it all behind.
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Sun Apr 19, 2020 4:39 pm
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Two of wands

Long before she was the Sentinel,
she sat in her mother's parlor
entertaining suitors who could not
see beneath her skin and oh,
if they could have seen the way
she burned, a pyre stoked
in the shape of a girl.
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Sun Apr 19, 2020 4:45 pm
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Page of coins

You can get a lot
done by following
the rules: a husband
looking the other way
at afternoon tea, his
respectable job lining
the pockets of your
best dress with enough
cash to buy a life outside
the one you've always
lived. The thing about her
is, she has never followed
the rules.
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Tue Apr 21, 2020 2:32 am
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Three of swords

Pain is
transient, a sword
wielded three times in the palm of your hand;
and her fury gone white-noise honed sharp as
a sword, transient,
is war.


See also: Three of swords (2019)
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Fri Apr 24, 2020 2:17 am
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Six of cups

Nostalgia is a spirit borne
outside of myself, a past
so dearly departed it hardly
looks the same.


See also: Six of cups (2019)
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Fri Apr 24, 2020 2:21 am
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Seven of coins

She stands on the shore
of the mirror lake; shattered,
a fissure reaching to the center,
an island where Death stares back.

What, may I ask, have you done?


See also: Seven of coins (2019)
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Fri Apr 24, 2020 2:24 am
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Six of wands

Victory is a cigarette
smoked on her mother's
porch, shared between
lips painted red. Victory
is a child who does not
belong to her, reaching
for her hand. It is the wind
through curtains draped over
a canopy bed, down pillows
and a pure white duvet.


See also: Six of wands (2019)
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Fri Apr 24, 2020 2:29 am
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Four of cups

The King of the forest
is sick. Soot bleeds from
the tips of his antlers and
the earth fills his hoofprints
with tar. (Once you were
responsible for him. You had
the world in your hands and this
is what it's come to.)


See also: Four of cups (2019)
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Tue Apr 28, 2020 2:29 am
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The hermit

Take them far from the mirror lake,
where Death keeps his typewriter
tapping out the breadth of your life
in Morse code, but you haven't heard
Morse code like this--each syllable a
hard consonant, an inconvenience discarded
like so many things you wish you didn't know
about yourself.
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Tue Apr 28, 2020 2:32 am
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Death

What is death but movement (wind
in the pines never rests, to climb to
their peaks would breathe momentum
into the sails of a life discarded to
stagnant water, but even rainwater
left in the bucket beside the cottage door
breeds life that drains life that breeds
death) what is movement but death
borne over again and again and again.


See also: Death (2019)
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