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Thu Apr 23, 2020 5:28 pm
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mckaylaam says...



Your writing is absolutely stunning! I won't be able to comment on each and every single one of your poems that you've published in this thread so far, but I'm amazed. Your latest, tacenda xxii, is incredibly relatable and is such a bittersweet piece. Keep up the amazing work!
And I love the thought of being with you,
or maybe it's the thought of not being so alone.


  





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Thu Apr 23, 2020 6:05 pm
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Que says...



@ShapeOfVoid <333333333 thank you! aaah they're the lines I centered my entire life poem around.

@mckaylaam thanks very much! I'm glad you enjoyed. :)
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Fri Apr 24, 2020 4:33 am
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Spoiler! :
Another sonnet! I’m not as proud of this one because I was trying to make a point more than playing with imagery, so it might need some fine-turning. I chose my college a year ago today and sort of wanted to write an ode to it—looks like it also turned out to have a bit of sadness over being gone right now due to the virus.

tacenda xxiii

A year has passed since I once chose my fate;
I still remember when I found my way,
The trip out west — and now I mark this date,
When I first chose my new home for to stay.

Though silly it may seem, I know myself.
I fought for my desires and so I won
Good friends who will not leave me on the shelf
A haven for both knowledge and for fun.

A family was something I had sought,
To love and make me feel like I belonged;
To make real all that I had hoped and thought,
To university I gladly thronged.

With loving friends I found it hard to leave,
And, missing all, I bow my head to grieve.
>Previously Querencia<

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Sat Apr 25, 2020 5:44 am
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Que says...



tacenda xxiv

I think it was Hume who said we
involuntarily draw our beliefs from
habit, from our past experiences.

Wearing my life down into grooves,
these causal connections gradually
harden into truths. Lessons learned.

After years of toxic friendships,
being ghosted and dropped and
torn apart, or worst of all, ignored
(indifference hurts more than hate),

How can I believe that you will be
good to me?
>Previously Querencia<

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Sun Apr 26, 2020 4:31 am
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tacenda xxv

and if this be
the last tale I ever
spin,
what of that?

it’s only that
I don’t quite know
how to say it all.

not only my account
of your coming,
the fall (yours, then mine),
the city, the bridge,
the dance.
(these words create
a timeline
like a secret
that only we two
know)

but how do I
even begin to say
all of the heys and hellos,
smiles, thank yous,
I’m sorry (again),
the goodbye
we never quite had,

I miss you.
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Mon Apr 27, 2020 4:22 am
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Spoiler! :
Hope you all can see the image! It seems all of my NaPos need just one attempt at poetry formatting, hehe. I just took a screenshot of a google doc in which I used the space bar too many times... Any of you amazing poetry format people have tips or want to let me in on your secrets? At first I was low key going to make a crescent moon but have even fewer ideas of how to go about doing that, so this spacey thing will have to do!
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Tue Apr 28, 2020 5:10 am
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Spoiler! :
”Querencia, when will you stop using star imagery?”
Me: “When it stops making me feel emotional!!!”

tacenda xxvii

Pretend as if I’d never spoken stars,
One night beneath these ever broken stars.

For you and I both know that you meant well
When you left me naught but these token stars.

Sleep through the ringing phone, sleep through the day,
And I, at night, will share these woken stars.

No more soft needles of pine underfoot,
I watch through the hours under oaken stars.

Between us lie seas of unbroken stars:
For all that, we’ll remain unspoken stars.
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Tue Apr 28, 2020 5:25 pm
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alliyah says...



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Querencia I really like the unexpected pairings with the celestial imagery in your last poem - "unspoken stars" is a really neat turn of phrase.

On the formatting one, when I want to format a poem into the shape of something I make a picture to put in the background, then type over it to make it fit the outline, then delete the background image at the end - I think that can be done in word, but I normally throw it in a Powerpoint (I discovered this technique when I made my chicken poem last year)-> & at the end in can be saved as a picture. In this case you could just put a circle in the background and then can line up the edges so it makes a little crescent moon. It's such a fun poem and I like your use of line breaks which makes the reader really slow down and capture the whole image. The way you currently have it formatted feels light and dream-like which also pairs nicely with the words.
maybe i make up colors for poetic cadence, but i don't think i can ever love someone who doesn't understand that teal is a different color than dark cyan
  





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Tue Apr 28, 2020 5:37 pm
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ShapeOfVoid says...



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Hi que! I really like tacenda 27! also, wow, 27! you're nearly done with 30!

And if you wanted to make a crescent shape thingy, you could always use canva! it's really useful, and you won't even have to take a screenshot - you can just download it as an image!
I was eleven years old
and I'd lost my mother,
and my soul.
And the crucible
gave me you.

mA
  





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Wed Apr 29, 2020 4:27 am
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Que says...



Spoiler! :
@alliyah and @ShapeOfVoid thank you so much! I might go back and reformat some of these poems and publish them, that was super helpful. <3

tacenda xxviii

how
rude of you
to know me so well.

how
dare you
care for me?

no fair
that you
are actually
a Genuinely Good
human being.

you’re impossible,
some quirk
of nature,
because nature
isn’t supposed to be
perfect.

i hate
that I can never
hate you.
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Thu Apr 30, 2020 12:51 am
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tacenda xxix

with everything that’s
shutting down,
don’t let this be the end of us.

if you’re up to your neck
in homework,
then the water has already
closed over my head
and I’m drowning.

just because
neither of us
has the time to talk,
don’t let this be the end of us.

it’s raining here,
nonstop,
(like my leaky eyes)
and I miss the
west coast.

some part of me knows
you’ll never visit
me here.
don’t let this be the end of us.

a bare six months
of shared memories seems
insufficient to sustain
a friendship from afar.
please,

don’t let this be the end of us.
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Fri May 01, 2020 1:01 am
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tacenda xxx

maybe there are some things
which should never be said;

if you knew the things I held
close in my heart, the doors
to yours might close forever.

the warm grip of your hand
in mine, the night we danced.
the hollowness that scrapes
me clean inside, these nights
spent restless and alone.
the chill of rain tangling into
my hair, the gleam in your
eyes when you smile, the
catch of breath in my throat
when our gazes meet.

a thousand words unwritten,
songs unsung, hearts undone.

I would speak it all to you
if only you asked it of me.

but after all we’ve been through,
I never regretted telling you
how I felt.
feel.
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Fri May 01, 2020 3:40 am
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ShapeOfVoid says...



woohoo! 30 poems completed! that's wonderful!!
also, the last poem was like. major angst. and I AM HERE FOR IT.
congratulations again!!!!
I was eleven years old
and I'd lost my mother,
and my soul.
And the crucible
gave me you.

mA
  





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Fri May 01, 2020 4:08 am
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EditorAndPerks says...



waoooo 30 poems ???? I always love your NaPo threads and this one was really well done! The subjects/tones/vocabulary was spectacular
"You know that I can't / Show you me / Give you me"
- The Truth Untold (BTS)
"Please give me a remedy / a melody"
- Jamais Vu (BTS)
"The lights illuminating your eyes / They're the me from now"
- Inner Child (BTS)
  





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Fri May 01, 2020 6:53 am
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alliyah says...



Can I just say I love how your 29th poem ended with the line "don't let this be the end of us" - great sequencing to put that as the 2nd to last poem in the collection!

Big congratulations on making it to 30 with characteristically beautiful & thoughtful poetry this month Querencia! :)
maybe i make up colors for poetic cadence, but i don't think i can ever love someone who doesn't understand that teal is a different color than dark cyan
  








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