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Mon Apr 01, 2019 5:00 am
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(you might find poetry here)


napo 2018 - skipping footnotes
  





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Tue Apr 02, 2019 4:39 am
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(one.)

[poetry...]

it's almost more interesting if you call it something else

(lies [half-truths, lakes with blue whales])
(misunderstandings [i can't help you there, words are ambiguous])
(dreams [is that cliché? maybe leave that one out...])

but they [whoever it is we address in these things] haven’t accepted these long winded thoughts that sort of spiral (and become the noise between earth’s long fingernails curved as pine needles and soil horses disguised as relay racing grasshopper songs as) prose yet,

so we’ll have to call it poetry

and fold our (half)truths, and (mis)understandings,
alongside our (careful) dreams and
believe that poetry is (still) worth writing.
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(two.)

experimentation in formatting

imagine some of the words in italics
and that basically sums up the impression
I’m trying to convey.
  





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Wed Apr 10, 2019 4:18 am
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(three.)

let's change it up

i suggest we come up with a new way for starting sentences

they say the most important meal of the day is breakfast,
and i for one believe them


using capital letters is over-rated and anyways,
it's misleading, because maybe i just want to use a mid-sentence
ellipses paired with a proper noun in which case .... i don't know if this is a new sentence or something else?

my suggestion, dear reader,
for the good of the nation, and those who read words,
is that we now indicate new sentences with a BOOM.

BOOM.

this way, there are no misunderstandings, false-starts, or missed eggs and toast,

BOOM.

you are free to use capitalization and punctuation marks and stray ink as you please without limitations for clarity!

BOOM.

we'll all know where we're starting

and where we're going.

BOOM.
  





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Sat Apr 27, 2019 7:38 am
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(four.)

forgive me, forgive me not

Forgive me for sleeping through April, I seem to have confused writing poetry with breathing, and anyways I always heard that double-tasking is a myth, but it's really just a optimistic way to say that you're inefficient. So I won't try to impress anyone by doing both at the same time - we've all got better entertainment available. But I've taken time to breathe, and now I suppose I'll write something because poems don't write themselves.
  





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Sat Apr 27, 2019 7:41 am
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(five.)

i am forever impressed that the roman numeral for 5 isn't just 5 "i's" in a row

(sometimes you can get away with not writing anything profound, by just giving a poem a title that doesn't match the content of the piece - people stretch their brains to try divine out some connection, and thanks to Critical Literary Theories and High School English courses I'm sure whatever weird connection the reader ends up making between the disconnected content and title is better than my comparison I was going to make a about pizza and broken-in tennis shoes anyways)
  





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Sat Apr 27, 2019 7:49 am
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(six.)

what's the name

I know there's that one imaginary reader
that's just not going to let it go
if I don't write a poem about pizza
and tennis shoes now, so this one's for you kid.

Functionality is a weird deal,
like people put so much weight into
brand-name tennis shoes and starbucks drinks
that sometimes they don't even wear the shoes
and they put folgers inside their starbucks thermos
just to keep up appearances or something
and you know, the same could be said about pizza and people
hear me out. why do we go to great lengths to
drive to restaurants and get brand-name pizzas
when functionally speaking the cardboard frozen deal
from walmart is going to be just as good nutritionally
and with people, no this metaphor's not advocating you trade
in your friends for the frozen fish-sticks at walmart, but listen,
why do we put up with people who make us miserable
who don't support us, who put us down, why do we deal with it?
there's some weird disconnect here, and i'm telling you,
think about it.
  





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Sat Apr 27, 2019 7:52 am
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(seven.)

or

are the lights flickering or...
  





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Oooh, these are incredibly fun and meta! I have just had a whole lot of fun reading these aloud - they flow, and roll off the tongue, and make me laugh (and I love parenthetical asides in poems so really you had me at hello with this thread).
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