tonight we're alone in a dreamscape landscape if i fall, will you catch me? downwards we plummet, arm in arm linked in a reckless descent or are we flying? it's too dark to see the edge of reason i am scared but alive and you're my wonderful disquietude am i bewitched? by you or this world or the night itself something new starts to blossom and i've never adored you more than this alone together in a dreamscape landscape
it's a clear summer day and we're grasping at clouds reaching out for the intangible and all but invisible with a stubborn, foolish hope
we're chasing something undefined counting stars in a smog-covered sky clinging to the faintest hints of light dreaming of a future of 'when' not 'if'
we skirt around specificity four months feels like forever you've become an abstraction untouchable and so far away i fear i'll forget you my phantom boy and once-real dream
we hold hands like we're lovers like we're in love, or at least something like it it's an intimacy we don't yet deserve but it's one that i need and if i knew you better i'd love you for realising it
when our gazes meet i notice your eyes and they're the bluest blue i've ever seen
let's stay like this always
i was lonely and you were lovely there's simplicity in this i'll hold you and you'll hold me we'll steal kisses on street corners and you'll take my hand in yours if only for an instant
i'll spare you from any romantic projections if you give me this moment of quiet proximity and a fleeting sense of togetherness for once i don't need to pretend we'll have a future beyond tonight now is enough for as long as it lasts just as long is it never ends
So beautiful and lovely <3 It's very lyrical. I can see this totally being a song. I don't know if that was the intention or not, but if it was, great job. I think my favorite line is "I was lonely and you were lovely."
"A poet is, before anything else, a person who is passionately in love with language." - W.H. Auden
@bluewaterlily Thanks so much! I'm not really sure what exactly I was going for, but lyrical is definitely in the ballpark of what I was hoping for! I was really proud of that line, so I'm glad it was your favourite.
is it simply lack of sleep or a general predisposition to angst over every detail of our interactions that's to blame for this creeping fear that i'll lose you before i even get the chance to call you mine?
why am i over-powered by my propensity for doubt when i have no reason to question your sincerity except for an unfounded intuition that romance happens to other people and not to me?
why is the only plausible way i can account for you sticking around is that you are simply too nice to admit you've lost interest?
am i searching for relief from the ceaseless sensation that my heart's in a vice not yet broken or even truly damaged but the pressure's unrelenting or am i hoping for an easy escape from the prospect of some future inevitable blow?
Hey there! All of these poems are really neat - I like the questions format of the first and fourth ones, but especially the latter, as I think you've got some really nice winding/combining of metaphors to make fear/love into such a sentient form. Really good so far!
name: key/string/perks pronouns: she/her/hers and they/them/theirs
novel: the clocktower (camp nano apr 24) poetry: the beauty of the untold (napo 2024)
"let's stay like this always" feels like a song to me, like I don't have a specific tune in mind, but just reading through it I felt like I was listening to a song on the radio - I think it's partly the rhythm and partly your diction. I like it a lot! From what I remember of that "five reasons I kissed Hayden Beaufort" story (or whatever, I don't quite recall the title), like just how big a band figured in the story, it doesn't surprise me that this poem reads so much like a song!
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