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Fri Mar 21, 2014 1:19 pm
DrFeelGood says...



Hi goldflame! Thanks a lot for your awesome review! I have written an experimental short, 'Her Agony' which is not more than 350 words, which is about 'no strings attached relationship' and something more.I hope you have a look at it.
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Fri Mar 21, 2014 7:49 pm
deleted5 says...



Hello @GoldFlame!
I would love it if you reviewed my newest dystopian Science fiction!
Warm as Ice, Chapter 2: Notus.
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Sun Mar 23, 2014 4:03 pm
Pompadour says...



*sidles in*

Could you please review this for me?

The Reality Syndrome

Thanks!

*sidles out*
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Sun Mar 23, 2014 6:44 pm
Sunkissed says...



Hi,

If you could review my new piece:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=109786

I would be especially grateful. :D

Regards,
Sunkissed
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Mon Mar 24, 2014 2:58 am
TheCrimsonLady says...



Please review:

Sorceress: Chapter 5

Thank you!!!!!!!
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Mon Mar 24, 2014 3:51 am
GoldFlame says...



All completed!
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Thu Apr 03, 2014 6:10 am
gauravkundu32 says...



hey there, I need review of the chapter I just wrote so i request you to review this Diakrino- the darkness within (chapter 2) and if possible please also review the first chapter as well. I'd be highly grateful to you.Thanks.
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Mon Apr 07, 2014 11:57 am
DrFeelGood says...



Hi Goldflame, I have posted a short story about exam result. Exam Result Waiting for your review. :)
  





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Wed Apr 09, 2014 9:17 am
Snowery says...



Hey Goldy! :)

A favour for a friend? :) Shadows
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Wed Apr 09, 2014 9:22 am
Zontafer says...



If you're not too busy: The Last Breath of Fire, Chapter 2

I'd love to review something in return!
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Thu Apr 10, 2014 8:33 pm
GoldFlame says...



Gaurav's and Gaurav's, done!
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All completed! Oh, and @Zontafer, no payment. :D
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Sun Apr 13, 2014 9:15 am
Zontafer says...



Hm, okay. xD
Thanks again for an awesome review!
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Sun Apr 13, 2014 9:34 am
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Last edited by fight4whatisright on Fri Sep 18, 2015 5:07 am, edited 1 time in total.
  





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Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:00 am
DrFeelGood says...



Hi Goldflame! I am editing my review request. I have got lot of reviews for the first chapter and the prologue of my novel. However some of my YWS friends who haven't reviewed the story, found my chapter quite dull and boring. I am really confused because the reviewers aside from technical nitpicks have said good things about the plot,characters and the pacing.

Can you please read the story and advise me (I know you give straightforward advise, and I really like it) whether I should continue the chapters or restart the story again. Thanks! And I know, you will give your honest opinion :D

The Perfect Thief (Revised) Chapter 1
  








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