Hi! Could you have a look at this? It's the first chapter of this big epic (in my head) fantasy thing I'm writing. I hope you enjoy it, but if not please feel free to tear it apart as I wrote it at 2 o' clock in the morning and my brain's too addled by exams at the moment to know if it's any good myself! Thanks.
Thanks! Great review. Lots of really useful advice, and you didn't kill my piece like you warned! I'll definitely be requesting another review once the next chapter's up! The name thing... since making my account back when I was 12 or something stupid, I've felt less like I want to be defined by gender, so I guess that's part of the reason for the ambivalence! Also just to be deliberately contradictory
If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put the foundations under them. — Henry David Thoreau, "Walden"
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