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Tue Jan 07, 2014 8:17 pm
Laure says...



I review

-poems

-short stories

-novels

I don't sugar coat my reviews, well maybe a little. I will give you my honest opinions on the content, grammar and characters and plot. Mostly on the content and the plot, things such as logical gaps, character development or the voice of your writing. That's the area I specialize in, but I can do grammar on request as well. But I'm no expert at it myself.
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Wed Jan 22, 2014 8:54 pm
Milanimo says...



Hi! Milanimo here! Could you check out my new poem "Monsters in the Closet"? I really want some feedback and any criticisms are welcome! Thanks in advance!
  





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Thu Apr 10, 2014 1:26 am
KindlingDragonsFire says...



I'm going to dare you to review one of my literary works, Aelita.
I would like some feedback on it... I want to improve.

Danke.
If writers wrote as carelessly as some people talk, then adhasdh asdglaseuyt[bn[ pasdlgkhasdfasdf.
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Thu Apr 10, 2014 1:55 am
Laure says...



Challenge accepted, on my way.
  





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Thu Apr 10, 2014 9:44 pm
eldEr says...



Hey Laure!

I have a poem here: the art of swallowing worlds

Thanks a mill ;)
Guuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurl.

got trans?
  





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Fri Apr 11, 2014 7:35 am
Laure says...



@Isha, done! Wonderful poem!
  





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Tue Apr 15, 2014 6:25 am
ShakespeareWallah says...



I was wondering if you could review this short of mine: Where Sad People Turn Into Flying Saucers

Thanks,
Un.
  





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Tue Apr 15, 2014 6:44 pm
Zarhail says...



I'm looking for someone to review my Intro, I haven't written in a while and I think I could use some constructive criticism as well as feedback as to how it comes across to see whether I managed to do what I intended (plot critiques are good too despite the general lack of plot thus far, it's pretty short).
  





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Thu Apr 17, 2014 3:07 am
Laure says...



@Zarhail, finished,
  





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Sun Apr 20, 2014 11:36 am
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@Unconsoled

FINISHED! x.x

You can come kill me later if you hated that very long review.
  





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Wed Apr 23, 2014 8:58 pm
Pompadour says...



Heyo. Review this, please?
Elementarni - Chapter 1.1
Elementarni - Chapter One; Part 1.2
I'd appreciate it if you could leave some criticism on the flow/ character development/ pacing and such.
Thank yew! :D
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Sat Apr 26, 2014 3:47 am
queerelves says...



Could you check out the prologue of my new novel? It's a pretty short one, and I'm not sure whether I want to change it or not. Azazel: Prologue
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Sun Apr 27, 2014 10:50 am
Laure says...



@queerelves, completed.
  





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Sun Apr 27, 2014 11:31 am
WritingWolf says...



Could I please get My Darling reviewed?
~You can only grasp what you reach for~
  








As a former (and rather excellent) liar herself, Aru knew that, sometimes, speaking the truth felt like wrenching a thorn out of your side. But doing the opposite meant pretending it wasn't there. And that made every single step ache. It was no way to live.
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