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Mon Nov 18, 2013 4:18 pm
lostthought says...



I get bored a lot so I am here to review the I reviewed. I know how tiring it is waiting for a review so I put up this thread. Don't expect immediate answers though. I have a limited time space.

I won't review anything that

-has 4 reviews or up

-Fan fiction

-Poetry
Last edited by lostthought on Mon Sep 28, 2015 4:18 pm, edited 2 times in total.
"Aaloo is potato in urdu, like AAAAAA-loo, or like AAAAA-look such delicious deliciousness."
-Pompadour

"MY SOUL IS A GREY ABYSS"
-QueenOfHearts
  





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Sun Dec 01, 2013 2:28 am
EmmVeePi says...



Would greatly appreciate a review of my poem I Wish I Was Him http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=106236
  





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Tue Dec 03, 2013 1:29 am
Maximilia says...



Part III "David" (of "Wallace Foster David")

Would love a review for this please...was slightly disheartened by the last.
think of its crafting as homage to the e.e cummings poetic philosophy...
  





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Tue Dec 03, 2013 1:59 pm
lostthought says...



You are both good and reviewed.
"Aaloo is potato in urdu, like AAAAAA-loo, or like AAAAA-look such delicious deliciousness."
-Pompadour

"MY SOUL IS A GREY ABYSS"
-QueenOfHearts
  





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Mon Dec 09, 2013 2:40 am
TheNeoAceofAll says...



He could you review my prologue and my first chapter. It is long (i know) and I personally hate prologues but trust me, it gets interesting fast. I do ask that you maybe wait to review the context until you finish reading all of it. You'll see :) Anyway, thanks a ton.

The Necromancer: Prologue
  





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Mon Dec 09, 2013 3:09 am
MysteryMe says...



Sorry... ignore this. I accidentally posted twice. :?
Last edited by MysteryMe on Mon Dec 09, 2013 3:11 am, edited 1 time in total.
Great minds discuss ideas; average minds discuss events; small minds discuss people.
  





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Mon Dec 09, 2013 3:10 am
MysteryMe says...



Do you mind reviewing my poem "On my Own?"

The link is here... http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=106475
Great minds discuss ideas; average minds discuss events; small minds discuss people.
  





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Mon Dec 09, 2013 6:32 pm
ShortBus says...



Hey there. I need both help and a review. I think you have to read it to help, so you get two birds with one stone.

I'm having trouble with tenses. Through the middle of the dialogue part, I change it from present to past. It should be an easy fix, but now I'm not sure which tense I should use. I really need to figure this out now, so it will save me a lot of extra work in the long run.

Quest Unable Chapter One (Rough Draft)

Thanks. ☺
  





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Sun Dec 15, 2013 8:25 am
Pompadour says...



I'd really appreciate it if you could review my poem: "Seas within shells."

Seas within shells

Thank you so much!
How to format poetry on YWS

this sky where we live is no place to lose your wings
  





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Sun Dec 15, 2013 9:58 am
BethanyMarieWright says...



I would love if you could review this poem for me:

They Fall, Themselves

Thank you!
I think it turned ten o clock but I don't really know
And I can't remember caring for an hour or so
Started crying and I couldn't really stop myself
Started running but there's no where to run to
  





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Mon Dec 16, 2013 3:00 pm
lostthought says...



I got you neo
"Aaloo is potato in urdu, like AAAAAA-loo, or like AAAAA-look such delicious deliciousness."
-Pompadour

"MY SOUL IS A GREY ABYSS"
-QueenOfHearts
  





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Mon Dec 16, 2013 3:01 pm
lostthought says...



Got you mystery
"Aaloo is potato in urdu, like AAAAAA-loo, or like AAAAA-look such delicious deliciousness."
-Pompadour

"MY SOUL IS A GREY ABYSS"
-QueenOfHearts
  





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Mon Dec 16, 2013 4:17 pm
lostthought says...



Short, pomp, and Beth you are reviewed
"Aaloo is potato in urdu, like AAAAAA-loo, or like AAAAA-look such delicious deliciousness."
-Pompadour

"MY SOUL IS A GREY ABYSS"
-QueenOfHearts
  





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Tue Dec 17, 2013 12:43 pm
Snowery says...



Hi, could you review my short story: The Keys to Silence Are Black and White
Thanks :)
The World Is Mine.
  





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Wed Dec 25, 2013 11:24 pm
KaiTheGreater says...



Oh please please please! I'll love you forever!
Stained Glass Life
Thanks! :D
Formerly DragonLily and RoseAndThorn
  








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