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Iggy's desperate for those red stars!



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Sun Feb 02, 2014 4:39 pm
rhiasofia says...



If you're feeling like some poetry, I'd love for you to review mine :)
Your head is a living forest full of song birds
~E. E. Cummings
  





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Wed Feb 19, 2014 7:41 pm
horrendous says...



http://youngwriterssociety.com/work.php ... 92e5fa5dd7

review plox! btw you and Isha are the first people I come to for reviews, you gurls always have good insight.
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Wed Feb 19, 2014 9:15 pm
TinkerTwaggy says...



Hi Iggy! I would like you to review 2 recent works I posted (I'll keep my soul however, god am I glad it's optional XD):

- Random Encounter N°1: Pyrospook
- Random Encounter N°2: The PhoBits

That would be it. Advices and opinion (fangirling is up to you :smt003 ) would be appreciated. Thanks in advance!
"Is there a limit to how much living I can live with my life? How will I know if I've gone too far?
And why did I spend my life savings on sunglasses for a whale?
I shall find the answers... to these questions."
  





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Wed Feb 19, 2014 9:40 pm
NerdBird says...



Hi Iggy! Your friendly neighborhood Nerd Bird here! :D

I would love it if you could review the first two chapters(soon to be three) of my novel The Shifties. I however would wish to keep my soul thank you, though you may find the Shifties might take yours ;)

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=108653
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=108737

Much appreciated! :D
All feedback is good feedback :)
Fangirling is optional
;)
XX
  





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Tue Feb 25, 2014 3:35 am
TimmyJake says...



*tiptoes shyly in* My soul isn't worth much, but you may have it! Of course, there is always a catch...

Prince John: His First Visit to Ireland as Lord Pt. 1

I am patient, so no hurry. :mrgreen:
Used to be tIMMYjAKE
  





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Tue Feb 25, 2014 4:22 am
yubbies21 says...



Hey, could I get a review on this? Please? :)

Thank God for Today
beep
  





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Tue Mar 11, 2014 5:10 am
Iggy says...



All have been reviewed!

One blue star down, four to go. Help me get them, guys! My next goal are those pretty red stars. *-*
“I can't go back to yesterday because I was a different person then."
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Fri Mar 14, 2014 10:35 am
NerdBird says...



Would love it if you could review my new short story Zom-Brawl! :D

please and thank you ^-^
  





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Mon Mar 17, 2014 6:25 pm
TakeThatYouFiend says...



Potential comes in black and white.
Room for one more?
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Mon Mar 17, 2014 7:06 pm
deleted5 says...



My new apocalyptic poem :D
Crumbling world.
I AM YOUR GOD. -AlexSushiDog
Checkmate Atheists.
  





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Tue Mar 18, 2014 5:04 am
Iggy says...



All have been reviewed. ^^
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Fri Mar 28, 2014 2:51 am
DrFeelGood says...



I have written the first chapter of my novel. I am not sure whether I should continue it. Please tell what you felt about the story and some grammar nitpicks as well. The Perfect Thief (Working title) Chapter 1
  





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Fri Mar 28, 2014 3:15 am
Iggy says...



Done. ^^
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Tue Apr 01, 2014 3:38 pm
PiesAreSquared says...



I need some help with the following two parts of a chapter.

Prakfura Raiders: Chapter One: Bad Luck Outlaw: Part One

Prakfura Raiders: Chapter One: Bad Luck Outlaw Part Two

Specifically, could you help me first find places where I can dumb down on the descriptions, and up them? They seem to hide in every dark closet, but when I do find them, I'll be able to edit them better.

Secondly, could you help me with the dialogue. I think my dialogue is bad in some places. I'm not trying to make my dialogue sound like poetry, just want to make it flow well.

Those two things would be great, you could leave out all the rest! *winks*

What exactly would you like in return? (I dislike asking for things without having to do something in return. I need the accountability to function properly!)

A million thanks!
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Wed Apr 02, 2014 1:29 am
speakerskat says...



Paper Hearts

and any of my other works
Salt in the air, blood in my veins, no more black clouds, just colorful days...
  








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